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He Was Right: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there!

Well, here we are. It’s International Women’s Day, and WIPpet Wednesday, in one efficient package. Since I’ve already posted to the Beauty of a Woman Blogfest, with my poems Seeds of Wisdom; Fertile Soil and Nevertheless, We Persist. I’m going to go ahead and get down to the business of this special WIPpet – the last one from Sea Changes, and Kifo Island, at least for a while.

I’ve been reading through the TnT story (it’s more or less in bits and pieces, at the moment) I’ll start sharing from next week. I’m happy to report that revisions, thus far, don’t seem too complex, and there’s a pretty good sass factor on both sides.

But that’s next week. And this week, we’ve kept Ava waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes, from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Ava’s father made a salacious accusation about her and Donovan, and she reacted impulsively. Here, the aftermath…

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is March 8, 2017

  • Three paragraphs, for the month – and because that brings us to the end of the scene, the chapter, and what I’m willing to share of this draft, at least for now.

He Was Right

He was right. Ava blinked back tears. She wanted to be mad at Donovan for being so right, or for still being so nice, even now – but she couldn’t. He was right, and that meant that she was wrong. She needed to make it better – but she didn’t know how to do that. “How could I be so stupid?” She really wanted another hug, but she was sure it would be even stupider to ask for one now.

Donovan smiled a little. “You’re twelve, Ava. Maybe it’s good you don’t think of these things. Maybe it’s not so good. But no one can expect you to be older than you are.” He stopped smiling. “But I don’t know if I can accept your case, now. At least, not if I’m the only one with you – best not to add any fuel to that fire.”

“Oh, Donovan -” Ava felt the tears starting again, and tried to hold them back. “I’ve really done it this time, haven’t I?”
 

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Well, as I’ve said, next week we move on…but I will be looking for beta readers for this novel by the end of the year, so, if you’d like to be one of them, drop me a line or two in that little box below!

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“But I Don’t”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there, and, if no one’s welcomed you to March yet, let me be the first!

It’s been a busy week in Shan-land so far…busy enough that I’m a little shocked that it’s only Wednesday! Today’s my first completely at-home day since Saturday, and I’m enjoying being able to do some hometending that’s not fitted hastily into the cracks between going hither and yon. I can’t say I enjoyed the dead mouse my daughter’s kitten gifted me with, but I’ll pretend that I’m grateful. =)

I think I’ve decided what TnT story to offer you (no, I’m not ignoring your comments on last week’s post, it’s just that my cup have runneth over a bit these last few weeks, and I keep meaning to get to them without actually, you know, getting to them…

The general consensus seems to be for sassy, so hopefully my selection is suitably sassy. I’m not sure how long I’ll stay with it, but it will be at least a month or two…maybe all four months of my creative marathon that begins in April and runs through the end of July. I do know I have several chapters, and sharing them with you will give me the chance to revise them, which means everyone benefits (even the readers over at fanfiction.net, who will get to enjoy the end results). I like it when everyone wins!

Now I think we’ve kept Ava waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes,  from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!
 

Context:

Ava reacted impulsively to her father’s salacious accusation about her and Donovan. And now, the aftermath…Ava has just declared that she has the right to live on her own terms….

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is March 1, 2017

  • I have one paragraph for you.

But I Don’t”

Maybe you do, Ava – but I don’t. This is my job, and my home. If he thinks we’re involved that way – not only will I not be able to take your case – I could end up with no cases, no home – and, worse yet, maybe even criminal charges.”

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Next week, we will reach the end of this scene – and, at least for now, this story.

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“I Believe You”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

Hi there!

Last week, I detailed several personal current events. This week has been calmer and more internal, with the exception of a very brief couples’ workout, the homeschool teen pizza party Lise and I attended, and getting to see George Takei’s Allegiance with my 15 year old son, then spend the afternoon and evening with him. He’s an amazing goofy big kid and young man in one six-foot-plus package, is my Boyo!

In other news:

  • The Far Shore, my sixth Kifo Island novel, is now a completed rough draft! WAHOO!

  • I’m still in the midst of some serious hometending.

  • I’m also plotting, writing a daily TnT drabble, and working on a substantial revision of my TnT origins story, “On Any Tuesday Night.” I’m doing this via Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class, and I’m learning entirely new ways to view and progress through the revision process. If you’re looking for a comprehensive and effective process for revisions, and you can afford an investment, this class might be worth a closer examination. =)

Oh – and about that white stuff in our yard? It’s mostly gone, leaving some tantalizing hints of greening in the grass. Now my epiphanies are piled up higher than the drifts!

As I mentioned last week, we’re getting close to the end of this scene, and then I’ll be moving on to something else to avoid entering the Spoiler Zone. I wasn’t sure what to share next, but the consensus from those who expressed an opinion is that some TnT fan fiction would be welcome, particularly if it’s serialized, so folks can look forward to a new segment each week. Since that’s also easier for me to set up ahead of time, and my Creative Marathon months (April-July) are fast approaching, that’s a definite advantage.

So Trip and T’Pol it is…but that still covers a lot of fictional ground, which leads to my next question:

What mood are you in the mood for?

I’ve got sweet stuff, sassy stuff, romantic stuff, angsty stuff, tragic stuff, happy stuff, and some that’s a blend of some or all of this stuff. I’ve also got crossovers that have a much older T’Pol, an inexplicable Trip, and Spock and family.

Opinions would help me narrow the scope of this decision, since I aim to please! Drop any suggestions or wish lists you have into the box below, and make your vote count!

Now I think we’ve kept Ava  waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes,  from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel  class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!
 

Context:

Ava’s father made a salacious accusation about her and Donovan, and she reacted impulsively.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 22, 2017

  • I used the 2’s (2/22) for six sentences.

I Believe You”

He took hold of her hand, and moved it from his arm gently but firmly. “I believe you – but I’m not sure that’s going to help. No father could let that go, Ava, if there’s even the slightest chance it might be true. And yours – he doesn’t seem predisposed to calmness.”

I just wanted to shock him, show him that I deserve to be left alone, that I’ve got the right to live my own way -”

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Next week, we may get more answers…or more questions. =)

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He’d Ruled Her Life: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there!

It’s been an eventful week for me, so far:

  • I bought tickets for my daughter and I to attend a Welcome to Night Vale Live Show, All Hail, which will, we assume, deal with the Mighty Glow Cloud.

  • After a very dry December and January, February has brought snow! Sunday, we received about a foot of the white stuff. Our yard has gone from blasé brown to winter wonderland!

  • I’m very, very close to finishing the first draft of my sixth Kifo Island novel (like, within 2,000 words, maybe less than a thousand)!

  • I’m in the midst of some serious hometending.

  • Epiphanies large and small seem to be drifting as high as the snow, just now!

But, all that aside, it’s Wednesday again, and that means another WIPpet (Work-in-Progress snippet).

We’re still with Ava Garcia  in Sea Changes, from my Kifo Island series. We’re getting close to the end of the scene, and then I’ll be moving on to something else…I’m not sure what that will be yet, and you can help me decide.

Do I offer more marketable fiction, or would you rather have some more of my TnT fan fiction for a while? Something that’s in revision, or something newly created? One-shots, or, like this, something I share extended portions of in serial fashion? Drop your ideas in the Suggestion Box below!

Now, back to Ava, who really doesn’t have time to wait…

She was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel  class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Ava’s father just made a salacious accusation about her and Donovan.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 15, 2017

  • I went with a Valentine’s theme, for 2 paragraphs.

He’d Ruled Her Life

Donovan my sweet, don’t assure him of anything.” What did it matter that she’d been drowning? She wasn’t dreaming now. Ava stared at her father as she reached out and put her hand on Donovan’s arm. He’d ruled her life, all her life. It was time to stand for herself, put him in his place – out of her life, and her death. She stroked her hand down Donovan’s arm. “Especially when it isn’t true – “It took most of the energy she had left to reach out and disconnect the call.

Donovan was staring at her. Only then did Ava realize he wasn’t happy with her. She hadn’t meant to go so far… “I’m sorry.”

What will Donovan say?

How will Ava’s father respond?

Can Ava fix this?

What happens next?

Come back next week to learn more!

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She Floated: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt. 

Hi there!

Did I visit anyone (or everyone?) last week? I think I did.

Let’s say I did. Let’s say I’ll be able to do it again, too…and let’s also say that, if I didn’t visit you, and you shared on the WIPpet linky, I’m sorry I missed you. It’s been a week of delving deeply into Many Things, and we’re still making the adjustment from my Accomplice working dinner shifts to breakfast and lunch ones, as he settles into this new job and the new routines that go with it.

But all that aside, we’re here today for WIPpet Wednesday, so let’s dive in, shall we?

We’re still with Ava Garcia in Sea Changes, from my Kifo Island series.

Ava was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

 

Ava presses her luck.

Warning: Her father has a potty mouth. You have been warned – NSFW!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 8, 2017

  • I used the digits of the month and day, subtracting 2 from 8 for 6 short paragraphs.

She Floated

But she wasn’t there, and he wasn’t here. She was thousands of miles away, and she was going to be dead soon enough. Out of his reach forever. For the first time in her life, she could say exactly what she wanted, and he couldn’t do a damned thing to her.

“Well, that’s too bad, Papi. I’m not telling you. No one will. The confidentiality agreements here are what you would call iron-clad.” Why was she doing this?

A memory of her dream. Because she was following the bubbles, and the bubbles were leading her. She floated; her father couldn’t touch her here.

Are you – yes, freak, I mean you! – fucking my daughter?”

She was drowning in the dream, wasn’t she? Wasn’t that why she needed to follow the bubbles?

Sir, I assure you -”

What assurance will Donovan make?

How will Ava’s father receive it?

What will Ava do?

What happens next?

Next week, we may get more answers…

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No Matter: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

Hi there!

Things are settling down a bit here, as we all adjust to my Accomplice’s radically different work schedule. After working evenings for their entire lifetimes, he’s now at a restaurant that closes after lunch. It’s got him going to bed earlier, and the rest of us learning to accommodate that into our lives.

I’m also in the process of applying for part time work. I’ve been out of the workforce for a decade, to focus on homeschooling. That was necessary, in the beginning; the kids needed me. But, in the last several months, especially, they’ve both grown to the point where they like time to be home on their own, and that’s also a valuable skill for them to develop as they grow to independence. At the same time, I’m ready for a challenge, and I enjoy meeting new people and having an outside goal.

I’m thinking this may even help my writing, because it’s often true that having a more limited time frame to work within can help me prioritize what would be the best project to move forward.

And it’ll give us a bit of added financial resources after a lean several months, which, with two swiftly growing offspring with appetites to match, can only be helpful!

I’ll also have a treat this month for those who enjoy my TnT fan fiction: Every day this month, Ill be participating in #Loveuary, over at Ritu’s But I Smile Anyway. I’ll have a tiny snippet of flash fiction to share.

But all that aside, we’re here today for WIPpet Wednesday, so let’s dive in, shall we?

We’re still with Ava Garcia in Sea Changes,  from my Kifo Island series.

Ava was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Ava just called her father “nobody” – in Spanish.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 1, 2017

  • I used the digit of the day, for 1 paragraph.

No Matter

He got hold of himself enough to snarl, “I want to know what the two of you are up to, and I want to know right now.” The telltale muscle at the base of his lower jaw was twitching, and Ava heard his teeth grinding. If he was here, or she was there, she’d be on the floor for sure, no matter that she was sick.

Will Ava’s father unleash his fury?

How will Ava respond?

What does Donovan think of this exchange?

What happens next?

Next week, we may get more answers…

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“Eres Nadie”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there! I’m getting to you late today…and if you’d like to know why, the simple answer is here.

Anyway, life’s hopping. New job for my husband…serious moves toward supporting ourselves with our passions for both of us, and the kids are growing right before our eyes….now, though, at last, I’ve got another snippet to share…

We’re still with Ava Garcia  in Sea Changes,from my Kifo Island series.

Ava was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel  class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!
 

Context:

Ava speaks for herself.

 

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is January 25, 2017

  • I used the digits of the day, subtracting the 2 from the 5, for 3 paragraphs.

Eres Nadie”

“Maybe that’s because you don’t make sense.” Ava snapped. Being too far away for his backhand made her brave, and maybe even stupid. His invasion of the peace she’d found here made her angry.

“Have you forgotten who I am, chica?”

No, Papi. Eres nadie.” Ava wondered why she was playing with fire. Bad enough to call him nobody – but to do it in Spanish? Now she opened her eyes to stare at her father’s red, spluttering face, and it made her braver. “And there’s no freak here, Dad. Just Donovan and me.”

How will Ava’s father react to her insult?

Will Ava push her luck further?

Will Donovan attempt to mediate?

What happens next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more…

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