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“It’s Siesta”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

I’m going to keep this intro short and sweet today. You see, it’s a new month, and I’m diving deeply into my new goals….and I’m not ready to come up for air just yet.

We’re back to Ava Garcia  in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (we’ve resumed, but no crits back yet.)

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!
 

Context:

In the aftermath of a nosebleed, someone keeps calling Ava, and Donovan offers to deal with them for her.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is January 4, 2017

  • I subtracted the month from the day; I‘ve got 3 very short dialogue paragraphs.

It’s Siesta”

I could answer for you, and tell them you’re sleeping. If it weren’t for the nosebleed and their calls, you would still be napping, right?”

It’s siesta.”

“Then let’s use that to your advantage.” He gestured at the console as the tone sounded for the fifth time.

Will Ava let Donovan answer?

What happens next?

What’s next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more…

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Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

3 thoughts on ““It’s Siesta”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. I love Donovan. I’m torn between hoping Ava answers (because that could be interesting) and hoping she doesn’t (because it’s probably better for her if she doesn’t).

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