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Alive in the Cold: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all!

If you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

I’m running a whole day earlier than I was last week, so I might actually get this posted before Friday is over…if I can finish it in the little scraps of available free time I’ve got today. In about 25 minutes, I’ll be leaving to pick up my twelve-year-old daughter. She’s spent the last two days with her best friend in a neighboring town. Before we come home, we’ll be stopping to purchase her some winter outerwear, since she’s had a major growth spurt since last winter, and her outgrown coat has been donated.

I’ll have a bit of time after we get home – how much depends on how long it takes, but she’s already made an initial selection, so it could be a fast trip that nets me a couple of hours….or not.

Either way, I’ll be headed out again this evening with my son, who is fifteen. We’re going to explore an exhibit on Alexander Hamilton at a local art institute, followed by a half-hour preview screening of a documentary of Hamilton’s relationship with the city of Albany. We’re pretty crazy for Hamilton: An American Musical around here!


Well, it’s now early Saturday afternoon, and my “ahead of schedule” status has shifted to “want to get this done on time.” Yesterday was exhilarating, educational – and exhausting. Once I was finally home after all the comings and goings, all I had the mental acuity for was to color-code scenes from a fan fiction WIP for future revisions.

And that’s OK. I don’t have any away-from-home plans today, so I intend to get some bloggish things caught up, including this post.

So, on that note…

Monday Morning Coffee” is a story that’s been with me longer than my oldest child. It began, in its earliest form, when I was only sixteen, and there was a compelling news story that fired my sense of empathy and imagination. A teenaged boy with schizophrenia wandered away from his family at a large outdoor event, and, several days later, was found, deceased.

From that story came this one – the connection might not be clear to anyone but me – but it’s there.

I’m not quite sure how to classify this story; any ideas and impressions you have, I’d love to hear!


A young woman is waiting for her train and musing about the disconnection of the people around her. She realizes that she’s being watched by a threadbare man she doesn’t know, but then a group of teenagers come between them.

Alive in the Cold

Bright colors and laughing voices that are alive in the cold, and in this lifeless place. If they see him, they don’t give any sign of it.

“And then Hunter – Hunter smiled at me! Hunter!

“No way!”

“He did. I saw it. He flashed the dimple, and everything!”

Will the girls notice the man?
Will he still be there when they pass?
Does he want something from the woman?
Can she help him?Will she?
Come back next week and learn more!

Monday Morning Coffee” was originally published in the 2015 edition of World Unknown Review, edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and eventually add it to my own self-published library.

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I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

12 thoughts on “Alive in the Cold: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

    1. What’s a story without questions, right?
      I certainly had my share during the decades this story was gestating. I hope you enjoy learning the answers even half as much as I did!
      As for who and why….read on, surname-mate….read on!

    1. Well, I have an almost-teen girl living at my house, and I’ve BEEN a teen girl, even if not usually as boy-crazed as Hunter’s admirers! =D At any rate, I’ve had some experience to draw from.
      So happy you enjoyed the snippet. This story kind of snuck in at the edges of life and became something I never expected (which, without spoiling, I’ll say seems particularly fitting for this story.)
      By the way, I thought you’d like to know that you just gave me the brainstorming trigger for a question I hadn’t realized I need to ask yet, so thank you for that! =D

    1. I like that you think I used them when they kind of just showed up when I realized that a Monday morning train station would be a busy place, and the chances that these two could watch one another uninterrupted are about nil. And in flounced these three girls, chattering about a crush….perfect timing, ladies! =D

    1. Magical words any fiction writer longs for! So happy you took the time to share them! As I’ve mentioned once or twice, the anthology is 99 cents at the link in the post.
      Or you can wait for me to dole you out a nibble every weekend, which also works. =)

  1. Darn! Eight sentences is (are?) too short. I usually post ten for that reason.The Shoop Shoop song was popular when I was in sixth grade. (Yeah, I’m old.)

    1. I’m not quite as old as you, but my taste in music often runs older than I am, so I thought of this song right away.She looks so serious performing it!
      I tend to stop the snippet wherever in the 8 -10 range that best fits the flow of the piece. In this case, it was 8; the next is 9. But, if you want to go ahead and read the whole thing, you can click the link and get the whole anthology (it’s also got a novella from fellow #8sundayer Fallon Brown) for less than a dollar,so there’s that.

    1. Thank you! More on the way for this week!
      We’re still pretty early in the story, so questions will be building for some time to come – hopefully, there will be enough answers along the way to make it worth the reading and waiting….or you can click on the link, and for less than a dollar, have all the answers all at once, and some other great stories, too!

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