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Meaning and Comfort: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all!

If you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link above and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

It’s been a busy and somehow off-kilter week here. I can’t exactly say why; maybe it’s that the rest of the world seems to be in holiday mode while we….aren’t, so much. (and, to prove how off-kilter things have been, I wrote that previous sentence on December 23. It’s now the 31st, and I’m finally ready to finish up this post!)

It’s not that we’re ignoring the festive Solstice/Christmas/Hanukkah season. We’re just laid back and having a simple, relaxed season of togetherness. We don’t have a family religion; it’s more a matter of spirituality and philosophy individual to each of us. We embrace the elements that speak to us, and let the rest be. Rushing around in pursuit of a perfectly clean house and mountains of material possessions would keep us from deep connection, so we don’t do those things.

Whatever the holiday season means to you – even if that’s nothing at all, may your year wind down in peace, aglow with comfort and joy. Merry Whatever to You!  

And now, on to the business of the day…

Monday Morning Coffee” has been  with me since I was sixteen. A local teenaged boy with schizophrenia wandered away from his family at a large outdoor event, and, several days later, was found, deceased.

From that story came this one – the connection might not be clear to anyone but me – but it’s there.

Context:

A young woman awaiting her Monday morning commuter train is being watched by an ill-dressed man she doesn’t know. No one else seems to notice him.

Meaning and Comfort

Maybe I’m the one who is supposed to give meaning and comfort this miserable Monday morning, at least to this one man.

I’m up before I really know what I’m doing, and the woman beside me scowls harder at my sudden motion. The 6:37 is pulling in, so I’m moving against the flow of traffic, hoping he doesn’t vanish into the crowd.

He’s still there, his eyes downcast, fisted hands now shoved into his windbreaker’s thin pockets. He remains hunched over, as though he’s trying to disappear into the bench.

He tries not to look like he’s watching the mug, but I know he is. I hold it out to him. “Happy Monday. This is for you.”

Will the watcher accept the gift?
Will the young woman be satisfied that she’s helped?
Will she miss her train?
Any guesses you’d like to share?

 

Monday Morning Coffee” was originally published in the 2015 edition of World Unknown Review, edited by L.S. Engler.  Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and add it as my own self-published library, currently in progress.

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“Especially Not to Me”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

So, do you remember what you were doing twenty-four years ago, today?

I do.

I was laying on the couch at my parents’ house, unable to lift my hands even to chest height, because of the pain in my neck. That’s where I heard that Paul Simon and Edie Brickell had just welcomed a son into the world.

Maybe I should back up a few hours…

I was driving to a mandatory training session for work along Interstate 787, which goes from a limited-access highway to a 45 mph stretch bisecting Cohoes, New York. People often speed through this area, even though there are major local intersections governed by traffic lights.

It was expected to storm later that afternoon, so I was focused on getting to the meeting, then seeing my last client of the day, in the hopes of making it home ahead of the weather.

One of the lights turned yellow far enough ahead of me that I was sure I wouldn’t be able to beat it safely. I had plenty of time to slow down and stop. I was waiting when I heard and felt a tremendous impact which sent my little subcompact through the intersection – fortunately, there was no traffic moving in that direction right then – and to the other side, my foot still on the break.

Twenty-four years, and I still deal with twinges and stiffness from the several compressed cervical vertebrae. I’m lucky, though – the seat belt that confined the personal damage to my head and neck saved my life. It could have been much, much worse, as my totaled car proved.

So, in remembrance of that day, this week I give you a single, impactful paragraph. And, yes, I know I’m late – that can happen when you spend many hours reading Really Good FanFiction!

I’d like to say I have regrets about that, but I have none. =D

We’re back to Ava Garcia  in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening, at the moment. Post NaNo, I expect to pick up steam for the next few months.)

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Donovan is helping Ava in the aftermath of a nosebleed, and her computer just signaled an incoming call, and he offered to answer for her.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is December 28, 2016

  • I‘m sharing 1 paragraph.

Especially Not to Me”

If I know them – and I’ve had a lifetime of practice – they’d just start calling the authorities with stories. They’ll take some out of context. Exaggerate. Make things up, if that’s what it takes.” She sighed. “They don’t like to lose. Not to each other. And especially, not to me. Ever.”

 

Who’s calling?

Is Ava right?

Will she answer?

What’s next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more…

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The Prosperity Principle: December 28, 2016

Hey there!

Welcome to my second ROW80 Interlude Post. I’m moving along; focusing on just a thing or two at a time rather than the wide-angle. I’m reasonably sure I won’t finish everything on my list, but I will wrap up a couple more, and move others closer to the completion point.

In the space between a quiet family Christmas and the new year, I’m enjoying this combination of finishing up existing goals within my grasp, and, at the same time, reaching a little higher as I move through the process of setting goals and objectives for 2017.

It’s a kind of prosperity, this time…prosperity I’m creating myself.

I added a few words to The Far Shore, so I thought I’d give you a little taste…

Holding her imagined actions in mind, Ubunta began reaching and digging her way down through the rocks. It was going to take longer than she’d thought, but she was succeeding, and she was tucked in under the boardwalk that ran above.

  • Note: I’ve listed the goals I engaged from Sunday- Tuesday. For complete goals lists, click the links below.

  • December goals

  • 2016 goals

Writing:

  • Kifo Island: Complete draft of The Far Shore (KIC#5); 24 Scenes, ~65,000 words. Primary goal. 2,756 new words; Scene 11/24 in progress. 36,792/~65,000 words/ 297 new.

Plotting:

  • Draft my basic 2017 goals/schedule. Primary goal. February writing goals added to Aeon Timeline; 2/12 months. I’ll be adding my “tending” goals once I get through March.

  • #atozchallenge: Add elements/ links/setup for posts in rotation; move to blog drafting interface. New side goal. Week Two: Added photos for B-G posts (so much fun going through our pictorial history!) 6/6. Created folders for these posts; added images to all. Week One: Added links; proofed; formatted, pulled from planning document, and moved to A Post file; 1/26 ready for scheduling once I have the #atozchallenge icons.

Revision:

  • The IDIC Romance: Finish revisionFirst Contact, With Jazz and get it in the hands of waiting betas. Revise Chapters 4-6 of A Backdrop of Stars and review 1-3. Primary goal; ABOS: Completed second revision pass for Chapter 1/3, “Returns and Remembrances;” Chapter 2/3 “Clinging to One Another,” first revision pass complete. Reread.color-coded Chapter 3/3 for first revision pass.“FC;WJ”: Began revising the new Scene Four.

Social Media:

  • Make 3 visits to others participants in each hop/challenge I’ve joined. This will be a Thursday/Monday focus. Primary goal. ROW80 done.

  • Interaction: Visit website, blog, ROW80, Albany NNWM and Yakon Village FB pages; ff.net; Twitter; Instagram; and Pinterest weekly, each site. Secondary goal. Thursday/Monday focus.

Hometending:

  • Homeschool Administration: Complete/revise/submit first quarter reports (due 12/15). Continue to file to Flickr portfolios. Gather materials for second quarter reports; facilitate further learning as needed/wanted. Primary goal.

  • Complete resets/reorganizations: study, family room, and kitchen. Use the 27 Thing Fling for structure/5 each per week. Add in 25 cycles a week for random indoor/outdoor tidying/hometending. Secondary goal. Study: 5/5; Family: 0/5. Kitchen: 0/5. Indoor random; 9/25.`

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Continue planning/ attending outings and at-home activities (personal and family) as desired. Primary goal. Conversation; menorah lighting; canoodling.

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly online and in person. Secondary goal. Visited page; write-in.

Selftending:

  • Journal six times each week. Meditation six mornings, and three evenings. Primary goal. 1/6 morning; 0/3 evening.

  • Fitness: Get a cumulative total of at least 80 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, 90 minutes 4 days weekly. Secondary goal. 80 min: 3/5; 90 min: 2/4.

Leaps of Faith:

  • Update my Writing Kanban board. Tertiary goal. Work table is clean, and I can get to the board; reviewed current projects and made rough list for updating; simmering.

  • Listen: Hamilton by Ron Chernow.  Side goal. Through Chapter 10/19; 29% complete.

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The Happy Ghost of Christmases Past: #CosPhoChal

This is my first time joining Dale and K’Lee’s Cosmic Photo Prompt Challenge, although not even close to the first time I’ve WANTED to join in…but that’s a different story, and this isn’t a story post…

When I saw that this week’s challenge prompt is “Christmas” – well, the happy Ghost of Christmases Past tapped me on the shoulder and said, “This is time. Do it.”

So, here I am!

To get involved with the challenge, post a photo to your blog on Monday, add a pingback to this post (or to K’lee’s) and don’t forget to tag your post #CosPhoChal.

Alternatively, add a link to your blog in the comments of either mine or K’lee’s post and we’ll come and check out your entry.
Any and all effects, editing, Photoshop, Instagram, morphing, collages or whatever other post production techniques you fancy are permitted, (in fact, they’re actively encouraged!) so get creative and turn your photos into artworks for the Cosmic Photo Challenge.
#CosPhoChal

This picture, lightly edited, comes from last year. My daughter, then 11, had a small pink tree on her living room desk. I liked the way it lit the room, and the effect of the lights and shadows on this glittery cardboard emblem of peace.

When she was small, my daughter had a small assortment of my clothing that had survived 35 years to be passed along. She dubbed them “The Mommy Collection” (she named most of her clothing, back then, for reasons known only to her. My favorite was her “All About Flying” shirt – a white pullover with a pattern of small silver studs she thought resembled wings).

This red paid wool jumper was one of the last things she could wear from the Collection. It was also at the end of her tights-wearing days, since she developed a distaste for clothing that fits tightly against her legs soon after.

I love the way she’s investigating the presents under her grandparents’ tree without touching, in accordance with their rules. Since she was about 4, then, that took a lot of effort! 

I’m lucky. My children, who are now 15 and 12, have always been close friends. Since I grew up in a family of 4 kids where it seemed we were always embroiled in sibling rivalry of one sort or another, the general sense of peace and enjoyment in one another’s company Jeremiah and Annalise share is refreshing and beautiful in a simple way.

This playful picture captures and enhances the silliness of their little kid days – they were 6 and 3, I think. Honestly, there’s still some of that same silliness in the big kids they are today.

When the kids were 9 and 6, I gave up my control of the Christmas tree. I let the kids have equal say in what was displayed there, which resulted in an ever-changing canvas that included underwear, giant stuffed snakes, naked Barbies, and more, in addition to more traditional ornaments.

Together, we made wrapping paper chains, and strung them willy-nilly.

I loved that tree and the decorations on it so much that I made a collage of various details.

One of my more serious, artsy edits. I decorated a small praying Buddha with a white and silver silk poinsettia, and got up close and personal, for a cool touch of peace.

May we all find that in abundance in a world that truly needs it!

 

Posted in A Round of Words in 80 Days, A Round of Words in 80 Days 2016, Challenges and Contests, Life Writing, Round Four 2016, Writers' Resources, Writing in Freedom, Writing Samples

Goal-Oriented Prosperity: ROW80 Round Four Final Update; 2016

Hey there!

My goal for Round Four was to take stock, gather in loose ends, and set things up for next year. I think I’ve done well, even if my reach exceeded my grasp in some areas….

Note: This is my final Round Four update, but I will be posting on my December goals Wednesday and Sunday.

Writing:

  • Kifo Island Chronicles: Complete draft of The Far Shore (~65,000 words); Primary goal. Scene 11/24 in progress; 36,495 / ~65,000 words; 11,596 new). Draft Tsunamis (~65,000 words). Complete at 63,461 words. With many other goals seen to, it’s conceivable, if unlikely, that I could surge through the end of this in the next week. Still, progress is progress, and I’m satisfied.
  • Poets on the Page: Write 31 new poems in October, using OctPoWriMo prompts and building for the Blogging From A-Z April Challenge 2017. Secondary goal. 31/31 poems written; various stages of roughness; plotting and drafting for A-Z! Goal completed!
  • Trueborn Warp/Weft Series:Foul Deeds Will Rise: Trueborn Weft Series #2: Complete draft (Scene 40/50 complete). Tertiary goal. Back-burnering until 2017.
  • The IDIC Romance: Finish remaining five #STaD wrapup stories. Side goal. Goal completed!

Plotting:

  • Kifo Island Chonicles: Complete planning (Settting/Time/Story World Mandalas for all 3 main characters) and plot Tsunamis. Primary goal.

  • Plot #atozchallenge posts while writing October poems. Tertiary goal.

Revision:

  • For Submission: Revise “Peach Liqueur Love” for Dark and Bitter (by 10/10); first “Philodosia” story for The Machinery (by 10/15); and Beneath the Ice” for World Unknown Review (by 10/31). Primary goal. 

  • Kifo Island: Submit Sea Changes scenes 5-24 to critique group. Critique crit partners’ work as posted. Secondary goal. I got a little revising done; but the group is on hold till January, when we’re adding a member, so I set this aside to focus on other revisions.

  • The IDIC Romance: ReviseFirst Contact, With Jazz and get it in the hands of waiting betas. Revise Chapters 4-10 of A Backdrop of Stars; continue revisions on Chapters 4-20; Love and Loss. Restructuring “FC,WJ”; pulling apart Scenes 1 and 2. Progress made on Scenes 3 and 4. “ABOS”: Scenes 1 and 2 highlighted for revision; Scenes 3 and 3 rough-revised. I’ll be carrying both over to 2017, most likely.LAL”: BBed till these are finished.

  • Poetry: Find information about revising poetry. Experiment with revisions of existing Trek poems. Side goal. Bbed till 2017.

Social Media:

  • Make regular visits to others participating in hops and challenges I’ve joined. This will be a Thursday/Monday focus. Primary goal. Better this month than last.

  • Interaction: Visit website, blog, ROW80, Albany NNWM, and Yakon Village FB pages; ff.net; Twitter; Instagram; and Pinterest at least twice weekly, each site. Secondary goal. Ummm…some?!
  • Continue in situ website design, with a focus on bringing in the various facets of my life in a more cohesive manner. This will be a Friday/Tuesday focus. Tertiary goal. Not really, but a bit, so it’s not a complete wash.

Hometending:

  • Complete resets/reorganizations: study, family room, and porch. Use the 27 Thing Fling for structure. Add in 20 cycles a week for random indoor/outdoor tidying/hometending. Primary goal. Closer. Switched from porch to kitchen. Not finishing this year, but happy with solid progress.
  • Homeschool Administration: Submit first quarter reports for both kids by December 15. Create Flickr portfolio, by year, or roughly so, for Miah; categorize and continue to file to Lise’s. Secondary goal. Reports done; Miah has a portfolio. Other things being dealt with sporadically. Ongoing.

  • Personal Administration: Clean, organize, and back up all OneDrive files.Tertiary goal. Making progress; taking three directories most months seems to be working well, so this will be ongoing.
  • Photo digitalization: Scan box of travel photos; save in organized files with backup. Side goal. Nothing new, and not likely to be this year, so BBing it.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Continue planning/ attending outings (personal and family) as desired. Primary goal. Lots of connection; one-on-one outings with my Accomplice and both kids. Goal completed – in many ways!

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly, in person and online; participate actively in critique group. Secondary goal; critique group on hold till 2017.

  • Paying it Forward: Offer beta reading, reviews, and promotional posts for other writers. Tertiary goal. In the process of doing something- this week, I hope.
  • Finish reading/reveling in Hamilton: The Revolution (Lin-Manuel Miranda and Jeffrey McCarter). Return to its rightful owner….*sniff*. Side goal. And my own copy is on its way to me! ❤

Selftending:

  • Journal six times each week. Gradually increase meditation to ten minutes six mornings, and four minutes three evenings. Primary goal. Not consistently, but some….

  • Fitness: Get a cumulative total of at least 90 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, 2 hours thrice weekly, by round’s end. Secondary goal. Getting closer to that 90 minute goal, and hit the two hour one for a day or two here and there.

  • Tai chi class, swimming, strength, and/or cardio training for a cumulative total of twelve hours in October; thirteen in November; fourteen in December. Tertiary goal. Not even close. I need better scaffolding on this one.

  • Smart Change: Choose a habit to change using the intial steps in this book. Side goal. Setting aside till 2017.
  • Intuitive Eating: Begin implementing first steps. Side goal. Setting aside till 2017.

Leaps of Faith:

  • Submit stories to Dark and Bitter; The Machinery; and World Unknown Review. Primary goal. 2 rejections and an acceptance.

  • The IDIC Romance: Submit chapters 4-10 of A Backdrop of Stars and First Contact, With Jazz to fanfiction.net; begin submitting to either Ad Astra or Triaxian Silk. Secondary goal. Adapted goal: Submit Chapters 4-6, ABoS. Get FC,WJ to betas. Revision is a lengthy process. Carrying over into 2017.

  • Self-publish “A Splash of Red”; experimental project. Tertiary goal. BBing till 2017.

  • Poetry Chapbooks: Do rough setup for Trek poetry chapbook. This is experimental. Side goal. BBing.

  • Create Patreon page, and incorporate it into my social media…this is an exploratory time. Side goal. Made some progress; drafted my rewards structure. Carrying over to 2017.

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The Prosperity of Presence (or is that Presents?): December 25, 2016

Hey there!

If you’re observing a holiday this week, may it dawn brightly, pass in delight, and end in soft wonder. If you’re not celebrating – well, may your day to day life bring you joy and wonder, too!

Yes, I do know that the round is officially over – but I work best with monthly goals, and a steady rhythm for accountability. Don’t worry; I am moving forward at a more relaxed pace – but I love the moving forward, and a week and a half of down time would be more like torment than rest, when I have ideas churning away in my head, so….here I am!

Most of my focus has been on planning for next year’s writing, revising, and administrative details – file sorting, holiday provisioning, hometending…and family time. I’ve also been rereading some of my existing fan fiction as I sorted and filed.

In the midst of the uncertainty in our finances…a windfall of sorts. My Accomplice realized that we were paying about twice as much for our life insurance policies as we needed to, particularly now that the children are no longer so young that they’ll be dependent upon us for many more years. So he shopped around, and found a much more affordable plan with adequate coverage, and we cashed in the existing policy’s value.

Most of the money is already earmarked, but we’ve budgeted in a few treats for everyone along the way. It will be a simple holiday, but there will also be some magic.

What does holiday magic mean to you?

Whatever it is, may you have and share it in abundance!

Plotting:

  • Draft my basic 2017 goals/schedule. Primary goal.  Aeon Timeline;Expanding February projects into one-sentence goal statements; 2/12 in progress. New timeline created; February goals in process; 2/12 months.

Revision:

  • Philodosia”(Hamiltoninspired alternate history): Revise and print a nice copy of Scene One, “A Matter of Honor” for my daughter’s Christmas gift. Side goal. Simmering was a good idea, as this is a much improved version. I even made it a cover and a dedication, and autographed it for her. ❤

Social Media:

  • Interaction: Visit website, blog, ROW80, Albany NNWM and Yakon Village FB pages; ff.net; Twitter; Instagram; and Pinterest weekly, each site. Secondary goal. Thursday/Monday focus. Holiday and family stuff took precedence.
  • Continue in situ website design, with a focus on transitioning to it as my prime online home in 2017. Prepare countdown posts for this blog, and post with link. Post one reblog and two snippets each week. This is a Sunday/Wednesday focus. Tertiary goal. Simmering. WIPpet posted: To Sleep for Real. And second reblog in progress; and that’s as far as I got this week.

Hometending:

  • Complete resets/reorganizations: study, family room, and kitchen. Use the 27 Thing Fling for structure/5 each per week. Add in 25 cycles a week for random indoor/outdoor tidying/hometending. Secondary goal. Study: 3/5; Family: 1/5. Kitchen: 0/5. Indoor random; 33ish/25. More focus given to those things that would nurture the holiday spirit; I’ll get back to a more typical routine this week.

  • Personal Administration: Clean, organize, and back up all OneDrive Move to Yogical, Stuff to Look At, and The IDIC Romance files. Maintain email below 99 messages. Cull/organize Writing Stuff email folder. Tertiary goal. Stuff to Look At folder emptied and deleted. Fourth and final sort of IDIC folders complete; moved to Fiction directory. Began with 1,724 Writing Stuff messages; down to 1,350. Now that the rest of this goal is complete, I can focus on this portion.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Continue planning/ attending outings and at-home activities (personal and family) as desired. Primary goal. Conversation; canoodling; cuddling; nail painting; workout; dinner; music.

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly online and in person. Secondary goal. Visited page; write-in goodness.

  • Paying it Forward: Offer promotional posts, reviews, and beta-reading for other writers. Tertiary goal. One offer of promotion on the table.

 

 Selftending:

  • Journal six times each week. Meditation six mornings, and three evenings. Primary goal. 4/6 morning; 0/3 evening. Fairly well in the mornings, considering the holiday.

  • Fitness: Get a cumulative total of at least 80 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, 90 minutes 4 days weekly. Secondary goal. 80 min: 6/5; 90 min: 5/4. With the preparations, this was a simple matter.

  • Tai chi class, swimming, strength, and/or cardio training for a cumulative total of eight hours. Tertiary goal. Cardio/strength workout at Y: 3/8 hours. Got another hour here; workout with my Accomplice.

Leaps of Faith:

  • Listen: Hamilton by Ron Chernow.  Side goal. Through Chapter 7/19; 17% complete.

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And here’s an extra treat or two; with my wish of happy holidays to you!

Twas the Night Before Christmas...

on Enterprise, NX-01!

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“To Sleep for Real”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Well, here we are, at the penultimate WIPpet of 2016. It’s quiet here; I just realized I forgot to get candles for the menorah. We’re not Jewish, but some dear friends are, and we bought the menorah a few years back, when we celebrated part of Hanukkah with them. I was sorting Christmas ornaments last week, and Lise asked if we could light it. So, I need to get the candles, so that we can.

Otherwise, it’ll be a simple day. Finances are very lean, at the moment, so we need to be careful what we spend – but time, love, and attention don’t cost money.

And you? What does your holiday season hold?

Whatever it is, may you revel in it!

We’re back to Ava Garcia in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening, at the moment. Post NaNo, I expect to pick up steam for the next few months.)

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

While Donovan is helping Ava in the aftermath of a nosebleed, her computer signaled an incoming call, and he offered to answer for her.

 

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is December 21, 2016

  • I‘ve got 6 mostly shrt paragraphs today, 12/21, by adding the digits (1+2+2+1=6).

To Sleep For Real

Ava had programmed the device to differing tones when she was eight. That was the year that she’d learned that she could fake illnesses and get out of school. Her parents, already ‘far too busy’ with their own business to concern themselves with staying home to care for her, would leave her home alone, and call throughout the day to check on her. Ava chose to ignore most of those calls, feigning sleep –

“Too tired to chew ice,” Ava murmured. All she wanted now was to sleep for real. “Too tired even to sip anymore. Just want to sleep.”

“All right.” His voice was soft. “Rest. I’ll have some ice ready for you when you wake up, if you want it then.”

But resting wasn’t going to happen until she talked to them. The tone sounded again and again, and, each time, it jolted Ava awake.

“Damn them,” she swore, after the third time. “Won’t even let me be here. Can’t run far enough….”

“I can turn it down, or off.”

Who’s calling?

Why doesn’t Ava want to talk to the caller?

What’s next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more…

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I know it has nothing to do with the story – but I think Ava might enjoy this if she were feeling better – so I’ll share it with you! =D