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Beneath Empty Eyes: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

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This week, I bring you nine sentences – Snippet #2 of “Monday Morning Coffee” my second published story, which I will self-publish in 2017.

Thisstory that’s been with me longer than my oldest child, now 15. It began, in its earliest form, when I was only a year older than he is. A compelling local event fired my empathy and imagination. A teenaged boy with schizophrenia wandered away from his family at a large outdoor event, and, several days later, was found, deceased.

From that story, over the course of decades, came this one – the connection might be obscured by time, but it’s there.

Context:

Our as-yet unnamed narrator is reflecting on society while waiting for her train on a damp. dismal Monday morning.

Beneath Empty Eyes

It’s a complex social construct – the girls in the coffee-shop; the people tromping the snow and crowding the benches and the space between. Today’s girl had two rings, at least, on every finger. One hand clutched a smartphone. When I looked into her eyes, to make a connection on some human level, she might as well have been a mannequin.

Are we all just all teeth in the cogs of one another’s existence, clicking together, then apart again, with nothing more exchanged than the mechanical processes?

I shake my head, water droplets launching from my frizzing bangs. The woman next to me sighs and jerks her bag away, her crimson-lipped mouth drawn up in a tight, closed line beneath empty eyes. Shouldn’t there be more joy, this close to the holidays? Enough, at least, that driving sleet and to-do lists didn’t take away any semblance of good cheer and communal acceptance?

Where is this story going?
What’s with all these empty-eyed people?
Are rainy Mondays really this bad?

Come back next week and learn more!

Monday Morning Coffee” was originally published in the 2015 edition of World Unknown Review, edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and add it as my own self-published library.

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Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

5 thoughts on “Beneath Empty Eyes: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

  1. I like both the title and the philosophical tone of this piece, hinting at unplumbed depths. In this and in your last story about the hawks, I sense that you’re striving for a level of profundity that goes beyond the usual genre tale.
    BTW, Effing forgot to link my blog post to my WeWriWa (watch out, cat, or you’ll be replaced by Twiggles the dog!) but <A href=https://eahoornaert.com/2016/10/22/effing-feline-102316/>here it is</A>.

  2. "Are we all just all teeth in the cogs of one another’s existence"
    Brilliant question, Shan. And brilliant song, I loved Karen’s velvety smooth voice. Soulful and melancholy, all the time.

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