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Through the Trees: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all, or pick a few, like berries….

If you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

This is the final serialized snippet from “A Splash of Red,” my surreal fantasy story – the child of my own life and dreams, with a generous dollop of imagery and a big dash of creative license. Honestly, it feels a little surreal typing that; we’ve been with this story for a long time now!

I have to figure out what to share next…but that’s still a week away, and I’ll think of something (and maybe just did; we’ll see). Until then, though, here’s a selfie of my son (15); daughter (12), and I at the battlefileld last weekend. We hiked, learned, and bonded. And, honestly, it’s just a coincidence that Lise was wearing her favorite red Undertale shirt!

Context, such as it is…A woman is attempting to win the trust of a little girl in a red dress, while hawks wheel above. Last week, the child stripped, baring herself to hawks, the woman, and the world. The woman sensed the girl’s intent, and (pardon the pun) followed suit, wondering how the child would perceive her matronly, thickened body. We pick up from there.

Through the Trees

I wonder what she thinks, if she can understand what brought me to this place.

“It’s a strong body.” She hugs me again. “And a comfortable one. You’re- we’re – good at hugs!”

“Well, what are we waiting for?” Suddenly, though the shadows are deepening, the world seems brighter, lighter, and the hawks lift together, lofting into the air, seeking other, easier prey. We leave the clothes on the ground, the dress a splash of red amongst the falling leaves, and run off together, through the trees, safe and protected and, finally, whole.

I’d love your input – endings are the hardest part, for me.

Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review, which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

    That being said, I’d love any and all criticism you’re inclined to offer.

    Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review,  which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

      That being said, I’d love any and all criticism you’re inclined to offer.

       

       

      Author:

      I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

      8 thoughts on “Through the Trees: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

      1. There were times while I read these snippets, that I wasn’t sure your story was going to have a happy ending. I really like the ending! I think it reflects the great courage it took to survive the constant predatory hawks. 🙂

        1. It can be tricky and fraught with danger, surviving the hawks – especially when they often go in disguise….
          I wasn’t sure there was going to be a happy ending when I began – but I was surprised and happy at the way these two resolved things, and out-peaced those hawks.
          I think they’re going to be all right. =D

      2. Aw that’s a great ending to a roller coaster of a story, definitely satisfying! Very emotional through the whole story. Best of luck when you’re finally able to get it self-published.
        As a moderator, though, I have to ask that you include a link back to the WeWriWa home page. If it’s there and I’m just missing it, I apologize, just let me know where it is. Thanks for understanding, and thanks for being a long-time contributor! :- )
        Marcia

        1. Ah…this website is new; I can see I need to adjust some things – like the color of my links!
          I’ve actually got two links to the site here; on in the intro (the Welcome To paragraph), and in a button at the bottom of the post.
          I’m glad you mentioned it. =) I’ll make it clearer for this week.
          I’m glad you enjoyed the story. When I first wrote it, I wasn’t sure anyone but me would think it was cool. It’s been very gratifying to have it so well received. =)

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