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Bubbles: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

I didn’t post last week. I wanted to, and I meant to – but I didn’t. Our family dog, Corki, died of a swift-moving cancer the Sunday previous, and I just wasn’t in a place where I could pull together a blog post. I also wasn’t especially up for visiting, or responding to comments. I wasn’t trying to ignore anyone; just to deal with the grief of losing a dear furfriend, and helping my family to do the same.

I’m finding my way back to more stable footing now, and ready to rejoin the WIPpet world, so let’s get back to Ava Garcia in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening very quickly, at the moment).

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is September 21, 2016

  • I‘ve got 3 short paragraphs today. Here’s the math: 21 (for the date) – 18 (all the other digits of the date, added together) = 3.

Context:

Ava is dreaming, and possibly drowning. Here’s the final sentence from my last snippet:

But she couldn’t draw in enough air around the thick words caught in her throat, slicing at her.

Bubbles

She was drowning, and there was nothing she could do as the ocean of words closed over her head –

Bubbles.

For a few eternities, the word just hung there in her mind, useless and unconnected to anything else, like it really was a bubble.

Is Ava drowning?

Why is she thinking of bubbles?

Will she find a connection for that thought?

Next week, we’ll learn more.

To read previous snippets, click the button (there’s a list at the bottom of the post):

Want more WIPpets? Click the button below, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

2 thoughts on “Bubbles: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. Boyo is at that age when he is OBSESSED with bubbles. Good thing we have a bubble machine to keep him occupied!
    I wonder if what Ava is experiencing is either a result of her disease – or maybe a result of the treatment? – that has somehow invaded her unconscious. I’ve had that happen a few times when I’ve had really bad heart burn and it’s not fun.

    1. My daughter is 12, and still loves them. =) She was blowing them for her kitten earlier in the week. She also has bubble machines (yes, more than one!)
      You could be on to something with your thoughts about Ava. But, of course, I’m not going to say for sure. =)
      I’m sorry about your heartburn. It really ISN’T fun!

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