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To Float Free: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

I didn’t get around to visit everyone last week, which is really sad, since there weren’t many of us who posted. My only self-defense is that, after months of having a teen and pre-teen who wanted to cocoon in their rooms most of the time, my daughter has exploded into a more social mode. At the same time, my Accomplice and I are taking advantage of his unemployment to get two workouts together each week – a fitness-oriented “date day.”

Then, on Saturday, the kids and I took advantage of No-Fee day at national parks, and continued our Hamilton-inspired local research with a trip to the Saratoga Battlefield. Sunday was my usual write-in with my local NNWM group….

This week looks to be even busier, so I plan to start reading everyone’s posts tomorrow – something a bit easier to focus on after a workout. I’m hoping that will ease the problem..because I want to get to everyone!

For now, though, let’s get back to Ava Garcia in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening very quickly, at the moment).

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is September 28, 2016

  • I‘ve got 10 sentences today. Here’s the math: 2+8=10 (adding the digits of the date).

Context:

For a few eternities, the word just hung there in her mind, useless and unconnected to anything else, like it really was a bubble.

To Float Free

Bubbles floated.

They couldn’t drown. They could pop, but they couldn’t drown, because all their air was contained inside their bodies, and they floated safely up to the surface of things, to where there was more air, and they could lift and soar and float up into the wide-open sky.

Ava longed to float up into that sky, or at least see it one more time before she died. Hadn’t she come to a place where she could see the sky whenever she wanted?

But now she was drowning, and she couldn’t make this dream stop. What did people say? If you died in a dream, you were dead in real life, too?

She didn’t want to die. She wanted to float free, like the bubbles dancing in the wide open sky.

Will Ava die in her dream?

Will that translate to actual death?

Can she float free like a bubble?

Is there a message here?

Next week, we’ll learn more.

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In the Break: September 28, 2016

I know it’s a ROW80 break, but I do best when I keep to the rhythm of Wednesday/Sunday updates, so I’m keeping on with that. Next week, Round Four begins…and, Sunday, I’ll be tallying my monthly goals, updating my annual goals, and unveiling a new set of goals for Round Four….yup, a busy day for me!

In the meantime, there was writing…two more Story A Day entries. I’m still a few days behind, but still writing, and hoping to catch up.

Standard disclaimer applies: I don’t own them; I don’t profit from them.

Day 23:

Her silence was louder than a scream. It was pregnant with all the things she might have said, and her longing to say them.

Day 24:

Something slammed into him from behind, and Jon just had the time to realize that turning his back on Trip was a stupid idea. Then his legs crumpled. He managed to keep his eyes open long enough to see a flash of movement, and Malcolm hitting the deck beside him –

Writing:

Plotting:

  • #STaD: Complete the rough sketches for 36 new September stories/chapters/scenes. Develop more detailed plan for each story as its turn comes. Priority goal. 24/35 completed.

Social Media:

  • Blog/Website Transition: Set and keep regular weekly posting schedule (ROW/#STaD/ 3 other posts weekly?); add relevant content to pages. Aim for soft website reveal at end of month. Primary goal. Spent some time; made some changes. Better sense of direction emerging.
  • ROW80: Keep updates and sponsor duties up-to-date; check Facebook page every Thursday and Monday. Secondary goal. Looked at ROW80 page Monday and Tuesday; working through links.
  • Maintain a rational rhythm for visiting other hop participants. Tertiary goal. Working on it.
  • Maintain email Inbox below 99 messages; answer blog comments at least three times weekly; Twitter, Pinterest, Instagram, and fanfiction.net comments twice weekly. Side goal Blog: 1/3; website: 1/3. Twitter, Pinterest, Instagram, Pinterest, Fanfiction: 1 /2.

Hometending:

  • Beautification: Do the 27 Thing Fling in study, family room, and porch at least thrice a week each room, and in other areas, indoors and out, at least ten times weekly (can include laundry and dishes.) Secondary goal. Family: 0/3; Porch: 0/3; study 2/3. Inside random: 6/10, including laundry.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Primary goal. Watched movie/workout/canoodling with Accomplice; Minecraft club with my girl.

  • Continue planning/ attending outings (personal and family) as desired. Secondary goal. Write-in; Minecraft; couples’ workout.

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly, in person and online; participate actively in critique group; do reviews as requested and available. Tertiary goal. Writer’s group Sunday. Finally a new crit. Will get to that this week, as I pick up my own current revision scene. Nothing on the review I committed to, as yet.

Selftending:

  • Write in Abundance and #onegoodcup journals, and meditate for at least eight minutes five times each week. Primary goal. Journaling: 3/5; Meditation 3/5 (8 minutes each).

  • Get a cumulative total of at least 60 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, 75 minutes thrice weekly. Secondary goal. 60 minutes: 2/5; 75 minutes: 2/3.

  • Tai chi class, swimming, strength, and/or cardio training for a cumulative total of ten hours. Tertiary goal. 5 hours, 40 minutes/10 hours.

  • Finish reading/reveling in Hamilton: The Revolution (Lin-Manuel Miranda and Jeffrey McCarter). Return to its rightful owner….*sniff*. Side goal. I’ve read through Tomorrow There’ll Be More of Us; page 132/287.

Leaps of Faith:

  • Continue helping my Accomplice in his job search. Primary goal. Helped him send his cover letter.

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An Exploration of Purpose: ROW80 Round Three 2016 Final Update

Welcome to my ROW80 Round Three Wrap-Up!

Overall, it was a good round. There’s a lot of green here, and the sprinkling of blue offsets the smattering of red. I was clearly more focused on some goals than others; I set a few aside as currently not priorities, or unattainable under current circumstances.

I feel there’s plenty here with which to build my Round Four goals, and I’m excited to get that process underway this week.


What will you do with the last quarter of the year?

Writing:

  • Kifo Island Chronicles: Complete draft of The Far Shore, and draft Tsunamis. The Far Shore (1 /2) currently in drafting; Scene 8/24 in progress; 21,533 /~65,000 words. Moving Tsunamis to November, as my NaNo project. 1,081 new words added to TFS. It’s not much, but it’s something.
  • The IDIC Romance/Philodosia”: Begin 30 stories/chapters/scenes for #StaD September, using existing threads and ideas with the daily and guest prompts. Draft one story each day, until end of round late in the month; mostly a success; a bit behind at times. A solid green.
  • Trueborn Warp/Weft Series: Foul Deeds Will Rise: Trueborn Weft Series #2: Complete draft. FDWR Saving for 2017 (maybe April?).
  • Monday Morning Coffee Sequel”: Draft a short story or novella, 5,000-25,000 word range. Saving for Round 4.

Plotting:

  • Trueborn Warp/Weft Series: Decide on November project. Complete character mapping and basic story elements. Setting this goal aside till 2017; Tsunamis will be my NaNo project this year.

  • Monday Morning Coffee Sequel”: Plan/plot this short story/novella, using The Writer’s Coloring Book. Only thoughts; no progress; set aside.

Revision:

  • Kifo Island Chronicles: Beginning in August, rough revise and submit a scene from Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles #1) to crit group weekly. Not as fast as I’d like; need to re-evaluate the time frame in Round Four. Currently working on Scene 5/24 Rough Revision Pass #1, where I track changes.

  • Revise “Peach Liqueur Love” using Sarah Selecky’s Deep Revision process. Nothing new; set aside.

  • The IDIC Romance: ReviseFirst Contact, With Jazz”, using The Writer’s Coloring Book and submit to patiently waiting betas. I’ve begun compiling and organizing the comments from my crit group for 4/16 scenes. Nothing. Set aside.

Social Media:

  • Blog/Website Transition: Adapt and keep to regular posting schedule. Answer comments, and return visits at least twice weekly. Share all new posts to website beginning in August; learn how to use galleries and gain skill at posting to pages and adding relevant content. Aim for soft reveal at end of September. Deleted scheduling and post sharing; I’ll deal with those once things are well-shifted. Progress in other areas ongoing as I learn my way around. A green here, overall.
  • ROW80: Sponsor duties up-to-date throughout the year, including four sponsor posts. Round Three submitted; 4/4 complete. I submitted an extra post for Round Three, and Kait is changing up the format, and dropping sponsor posts, for Round Four. A nice pretty blue here.
  • Develop a rough, rational rhythm for visiting blogs and hop participants. Doing better, overall.

Hometending:

  • Homeschool Administration: Complete all pending paperwork, testing, etc. Create Flickr portfolios, by year, or roughly so, for both children. A solid green – all paperwork done, but a bit stalled on portfolio stuff. Needs more thought and direction.

  • Personal Administration: Clean, organize, and back up all OneDrive files; delete excess. Breaking the goal down helped; it will take a while, though.
  • Yard Beautification: Maintain in an increasingly presentable manner; declutter outgrown kid-things and random life debris. A little weeding and decluttering.
  • Cancel five digital subscriptions we no longer need. 4/5; a solid green.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Major success; major delight! This one’s pretty easy, and the payout is huge. =)

  • Continue planning/ attending outings (personal and family) as desired. Yes! We’ve suddenly exploded into outside activities, after months of mostly “cocooning” at home. September has been a whirlwind!

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly, in person and online; participate actively in critique group and beta reading. Interaction was adequate; not much happening, caught up; submitted once, with another on the way. Beta read project canceled; author going another way. Calling this a solid green.

Selftending:

  • Smart Change: Do prep work; choose a contribution to focus on. Bbing till Round Four.
  • Write in Abundance and #onegoodcup journals, and meditate for at least five minutes five times each weekly. Explore one new meditative practice each month. Deleting the new meditative practice; I’m settling in with what I have for a while. Journaling was good; meditation fair.

  • Get a cumulative total of at least 60 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, and more strenuous activities five times weekly. Better in August;better yet in the latter half of 2016. Not giving this a blue; but it’s a solid green – I’m on my way, and have a plan. =)

Leaps of Faith:

  • The IDIC Romance: Finish revisions for “Love and Loss” chapters 1-20 at ff.net. Nothing new; still on Chapter Four (and a reread says those first chapters could use another pass, too.)

  • A Splash of Red”; compile notes and do pre-self-publication revision pass. Create at least three cover mockups before consulting my local cover designer. Nothing new; setting aside for Round Four.

  • Poetry Chapbooks: Do rough setup for Trek poetry chapbook. A few poems gathered.

  • Business cards: Play with creating three designs; investigate VistaPrint. Nothing new.

  • Complete resets/reorganizations in study and family room. Some. Picked up momentum later in the round, as I adopted a new tactic.

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No Pause, Just Purpose: September 25, 2016

Yes, I know that ROW80 Round Three is over. But I seem to thrive on keeping to this Wednesday/Sunday schedule as much as possible, and, since I set monthly goals…here I am, to account for myself.

Life is still outwardly-focused. Wednesday was the only day without an outing: Thursday, my Accomplice and I had our second couples’ workout of the week (went to the Y together, then did our own things, once there). Friday, Lise and I headed back to Yacon Village for homeschool teen/tween day. Saturday, both kids and I headed to Saratoga Battlefield for Hamilton-related Revolutionary War learning, and a good deal of hiking and seeing incredible vistas on a day that was absolutely perfect for it.

Tonight, I’m heading out to my writers’ group, tomorrow is another couples’ workout, and Tuesday Minecraft club at Yacon for the girl.

It looks like I’m going to need to adapt Round Four and 2016 goals to take this new reality into account.

How do you adjust your writing goals, when life changes?


I did complete three Story A Day entries a amid the busy-ness.

Standard disclaimer applies: I don’t own them; I don’t profit from them.

 

Day 20:

“Vulcans don’t scowl, Trip.”

“Maybe most don’t. Maybe it takes being bonded to a human to make it happen. But you, my love, are one scowling Vulcan lady right now. What’s your problem with fan fiction?”

Day 21:

 

“There’s no ‘us’ here, Trip. Just you. And you can’t wear T’Pol’s underwear.”

Day 22:

That hit him like a phase pistol blast, and Trip rocked back in his chair. “Oh, hell. Phlox, she didn’t know what I was saying – and I flat-out told her she’s not everything to me. But she is, Phlox. I’ve been driving myself crazy wanting her, wanting to tell her I love her -”

Writing:

  • Story A Day September 2016 : Write 35 stories this month (the final 5 will be vignettes written on the same day). The IDIC Romance: Cowled: 8; Parted From Me: 8; “Do You?”: 8; A Backdrop of Stars: 6. Hamilton alternate history: Philodosia: 5. Priority goal. 23/35 in progress; Parted: 2/8 in progress; Philodosia: 1/5; Backdrop: 1/6. A bit behind; lots of physical activity away from the laptop.

Plotting:

  • #STaD: Complete the rough sketches for 36 new September stories/chapters/scenes. Develop more detailed plan for each story as its turn comes. Priority goal. 23/35 completed; a bit behind here, too.

Social Media:

  • Blog/Website Transition: Set and keep regular weekly posting schedule; add relevant content to pages. Aim for soft website reveal at end of month. Primary goal. I’m not going to set up a regular schedule until 2017; need time for website transition. Other aspects moving forward slowly.
  • ROW80: Keep updates and sponsor duties up-to-date; check Facebook page every Thursday and Monday. Secondary goal. Update posted; visited everyone on linky; Facebook page Tuesday. Could do better with the Facebook page; it’s not yet habit.
  • Maintain email Inbox below 99 messages; answer blog comments at least three times weekly; Twitter, Pinterest, Instagram, and fanfiction.net comments twice weekly. Side goal. Blog: 1/3; website: 2/3. Twitter, Pinterest, Fanfiction: 1 /2. Having some trouble juxtaposing this with all the physical activity.

Hometending:

  • Homeschool Administration: Complete and submit fourth quarter reports; narrative review; and test scores to district by September 15. Deal with correspondence as needed. Primary goal. Letter sent; goal completed at last – WAHOO!!!
  • Beautification: Do the 27 Thing Fling in study, family room, and porch at least thrice a week each room, and in other areas, indoors and out, at least ten times weekly (can include laundry and dishes.) Secondary goal. Family: 3/3; Porch: 2/3; study 1/3. Inside random: 15ish/10, including laundry and dishes; stopped counting after that, but there was more.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Primary goal. Conversation; planning; write-in; workout date; Minecraft club; teen/tween day.
  • Continue planning/ attending outings (personal and family) as desired. Secondary goal. Couples’ workout Thursday; teen/tween day Friday; Saratoga National Historical Park  with both kids Saturday.
  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly, in person and online; participate actively in critique group; do reviews as requested and available. Tertiary goal. Writer’s group Sunday. Finally a new crit. Will get to that this week, as I pick up my own current revision scene.

Selftending:

  • Write in Abundance and #onegoodcup journals, and meditate for at least eight minutes five times each week. Primary goal. Journaling: 6/5; Meditation 5/5 (with a couple of longer and shorter sessions, I’m calling this week even).
  • Get a cumulative total of at least 60 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly, 75 minutes thrice weekly. Secondary goal. 60 minutes: 5/5; 75 minutes: 3/3 (considerably more on Monday, Thursday, and Saturday) – first week I’ve managed this – WAHOO!!!!
  • Tai chi class, swimming, strength, and/or cardio training for a cumulative total of ten hours. Tertiary goal. Swimming, strength, tai chi, hiking (cardio); 5 /10 hours. After a slow start, I’m making great progress here!
  • Finish reading/reveling in Hamilton: The Revolution (Lin-Manuel Miranda and Jeffrey McCarter). Return to its rightful owner….*sniff*. Side goal. I’ve read through “Wait For It” (which seems like a perfect stopping point); page 95/287. Decided I eventually need my own copy of this book!

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Overlooking the Hudson from the Great Redoubt – fortifications that protected the British hospital, supplies, and munitions depot.

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A Different Perspective on Busy-Ness: #weekendcoffeeshare and #SoCS

If we were having coffee, I’d apologize for being rather tired – it’s been a busy time in the life of my family, and also a time of transition. So maybe you won’t mind that I’m a bit distracted and saggy, and that I’m not even sure there’s coffee to be had – I will go check during the next commercial break in this The Big Bang Theory rerun. If you’re watching me when I get up, you might see that I’m a little stiff.

My kids and I spent several hours this afternoon and evening touring the Saratoga Battlefield – another chapter in our Hamilton research, not to mention a wonderful way to enjoy the first Saturday of autumn, with a hint of coolness in the air, glorious clouds, and colors just starting to touch the leaves. We spent a little time in the visitor’s center, where we’ve been before: We looked at some Revolutionary War-era artifacts and commentary, watched the 20 minute movie on the Battles of Saratoga, which has the distinction of being the Turning Point of the American Revolution. Based on the American success in these two battles, the French committed to helping, which, four years later, led to ultimate victory at Yorktown.

By the way, my Accomplice had set up the coffeepot, so I pressed brew, and, in a few minutes, we will have fresh coffee.

Now, back to today’s happy-busy:

Lise and I poked around the gift shop after we all walked a little way down the Wilkinson Trail. It was cool to see how many of the books they’re selling there we already own. =)

And then we all got into the car, and I loaded the audio tour mobile app on my phone, and away we went for a nine-mile, ten stop excursion into history. At most locations, we listened to the narrative in the parking area, then hiked out on a variety of paths and trails to locations significant to the battles.

We explored Neilson Farm, where a family of ten lived in a house not really substantially larger than our living room – even if you include the loft!

We toured American and British redoubts, points of interest, and quite a lot of cannon. We also explored the terrain of our own hometown – Bemis Heights, where the American army was encamped, is where my grandparents lived, and my father grew up. As a little girl, I would often play with the cannon and musket balls he kept in a drawer beneath his work bench. It never occurred to anyone then that they were lead, and maybe children shouldn’t be touching them, and it never occurred to me that everyone didn’t have a battlefield almost literally in their backyard.

Our family plan is to relocate to Oregon, so the kids will be a whole continent away from what is all three of our hometown. So, as much as the history, the physical exertion, and the time outdoors, we were connecting with a heritage we all share. More than that, I worked for the Youth Conservation Corps in the Battlefield the summer I was 16-17; not that much older than my just-15 son. When we got to the (in)famous Boot Monument that gives nameless tribute to Benedict Arnold, we discussed whether the black paint on the wrought-iron fence surrounding it is still the coat I helped to put on it, back then. I thought not (it’s been three decades, now), but Jeremiah pointed out that the paint does indeed appear to have some solid age on it. So, maybe…

But even all that wasn’t the real treat of those hours. All other things aside, it was a chance to connect, and build memories with my kids that will hopefully last them throughout their lives. They’re 12 and 15 – the years of active parenting are winding down, and these big kids who sprang up from my babies are an ongoing revelation. I love these long, leisurely times of connection and conversation with them, where I get to watch them interacting with each other and see where they are in their growth.

If we were having coffee, I’d tell you that, right now, this minute, they’re on their way to becoming the adults they will soon be. They’re busy with that. Sometimes, the ways they’re busy with it don’t include me – which makes sense. They won’t have the same need for me when they’re older. They don’t have the same need for me now they did when they were younger.

Right now is all we have, ever, any of us.

I’m glad I spent those hours busily learning who my kids are, right now.

Well, here we are at the end of the post, but the fresh coffee’s ready. Shall we just sit and sip, while you tell me a little about what’s going on with you?

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Fierce as a Plummeting Hawk: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all, or pick a few like leftover holiday memories….

If you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

Yup, once again I’m running late to the party here. I am a bit earlier than I’ve been in recent months; it’s late Saturday morning as I type this, even though it’s likely to be late into the afternoon or evening before I get it to post.

Those of you who read here regularly may have noticed that I’ve become fascinated (obsessed, consumed, bat-crap crazy; you choose the word) with Hamilton over the last few months. In all honesty, I’ve always thought Alexander Hamilton was a pretty cool guy, but I had no clue how much I didn’t know about him and his life.

Then I heard the musical, and my daughter, once she got into it, asked me to write her a “shipfic” where Aaron Burr’s daughter, Theodosia, and Alexander Hamilton’s son Philip end up together. Because I like doing things right, I started doing research to see if there was an actual historical point at which I could make it so. And because we happen to live in the same part of upstate New York that was once home to General Philip Schuyler (who just happens to have been Alexander’s father-in-law), and because we also happen to be an unschooling family, that research has taken on physical components.

This afternoon, for instance, the kids and I are headed to the “battlefield in our backyard”, Saratoga National Historical Park. We’ll be exploring the turning point of the American Revolution – the battles that encouraged the French government to offer assistance without which we might still be British colonies.

But all that is still an hour or so away, and I wanted to get this post at least partly drafted before we go, so…

Today I offer you the penultimate serialized snippet from “A Splash of Red,” my surreal fantasy story – the child of my own life and dreams, with a generous dollop of imagery and a big dash of creative license.

Yes, you read that right. Next week, we finally get to the end of the story, so things will begin to come clear…or as clear as they’ll get, anyway. And then I have to figure out what to share next…but that’s not a riddle for today. So let’s just launch into these eight sentences, shall we?

Context, such as it is…A woman is attempting to win the trust of a little girl in a red dress, while hawks wheel above. Last week, the woman and child finally began to find some resolution and unity – but then the child squirms free.

Fierce As a Plummeting Hawk

Standing, she tugs and wrestles and tears at the red dress, until it falls around her ankles, and then she kicks it away, fierce as a plummeting hawk once again. She stands naked and bold upon the moss, her toes digging in, her long tangled golden hair dancing with the breeze. Her eyes are merry, as a hawk passes high above.

Hurry, hurry,” she says, reaching for me, to pull me up.

And I know. If she can bare herself to the hawks, to me, to the world, how than can I not…?

The hawks cry out, and the girl I was watches me.

I stand and strip, and know that she’s studying the thickened body she will have one day.

What happens next?

How does this story end?

Next week brings answers…until then, you’ll just have to… wait for it!

Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review, which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

    That being said, I’d love any and all input and criticism you’re inclined to offer.

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    Bubbles: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

    Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

    I didn’t post last week. I wanted to, and I meant to – but I didn’t. Our family dog, Corki, died of a swift-moving cancer the Sunday previous, and I just wasn’t in a place where I could pull together a blog post. I also wasn’t especially up for visiting, or responding to comments. I wasn’t trying to ignore anyone; just to deal with the grief of losing a dear furfriend, and helping my family to do the same.

    I’m finding my way back to more stable footing now, and ready to rejoin the WIPpet world, so let’s get back to Ava Garcia in Sea Changes

    Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

    The premise:

    In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

    Note:

    This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening very quickly, at the moment).

    Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

    WIPpet Math:

    • Today is September 21, 2016

    • I‘ve got 3 short paragraphs today. Here’s the math: 21 (for the date) – 18 (all the other digits of the date, added together) = 3.

    Context:

    Ava is dreaming, and possibly drowning. Here’s the final sentence from my last snippet:

    But she couldn’t draw in enough air around the thick words caught in her throat, slicing at her.

    Bubbles

    She was drowning, and there was nothing she could do as the ocean of words closed over her head –

    Bubbles.

    For a few eternities, the word just hung there in her mind, useless and unconnected to anything else, like it really was a bubble.

    Is Ava drowning?

    Why is she thinking of bubbles?

    Will she find a connection for that thought?

    Next week, we’ll learn more.

    To read previous snippets, click the button (there’s a list at the bottom of the post):

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