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“With Alacrity”: Details Adding Up for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt. 

This month, I’ve been playing Evil Fan Fiction Writer. It started on the first Wedesday of the month, when I shared only two sentences, with no context at all. 

I filled in a bit more last week, but we still didn’t find out who that was in the bathroom. And, guess what?

Yup. You got it.

I’m not telling you this week, either.

If you pay attention to this week’s snippet, though, you might get a bit of indirect context on what the bleep he’s doing in there! This snippet takes place immediately following last week’s “I’ll Await You.”


Standard disclaimer. I don’t own them; I don’t make money on them; I just love them!


“No. Honestly, I’m more interested in the guy in the bathroom.” -Hoshi Sato

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is August 17, 2016

  • Seventeen sentences. It’s been a week of seemingly ceaseless administrative details; I’m keeping this simple, for sanity’s sake.

Follow the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet to WIPpet!
Follow the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet to WIPpet!

With Alacrity”

“I’ll be as close as I can manage, tinatinga.” That was absolutely a promise.

T’Pol gave one of her tiny nods, and turned to Hoshi. “Let us go, kiral. With alacrity.” She suited action to words, and pressed the door release. She didn’t look back, but everything in her body language said she wanted to.

Hoshi followed the Vulcan woman out of her lover’s quarters, not at all sure what to expect, or what T’Pol needed from her, beyond someone who could remind her not to touch the man she so desperately needed to touch. The title kiral had no English equivalent, but Hoshi knew enough of Vulcan culture to know it was a serious business, that her role was to be whatever T’Pol wanted, or, if she wasn’t in command of herself, whatever T’Pol needed.

“Please feel free to speak, if you wish, Hoshi. I may not respond, but -”

T’Pol froze. They were ten paces away, just at the point where the turn of the corridor would hide Trip’s doorway from view. “I can go no further. Not until he is here.” There wasn’t any need to ask her who she meant; it was, as the old saying put it, written all over her. “Do not come between me and my t’hy’la, kiral.”

What would happen if Hoshi got between Trip and T’Pol?

Why is T’Pol issuing this warning now?

And, of course, who is the guy in the bathroom?

Next week, I’m finally going to make a backwards hop, and clue you in. Of course, you’re welcome to try to guess in the meantime!




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6 thoughts on ““With Alacrity”: Details Adding Up for WIPpet Wednesday

    1. I’m not sure I would mention THAT to her – ever! I mean, unless you’re a lot better at hand to hand combat than I am! She was jealous enough BEFORE they were bonded, and I don’t think logic has anything to do with it.
      That being said, Trip is a sweet (and really, really brave!) guy. He deserves to be happy.
      With YOU, T’Pol. Honest. 😉

  1. I’m not going to bother to try to guess since my experience with the Enterprise series is as sparse as it is these days (and my head is… not in the best of places for focus). But I have a question for you… about "where" in the series would you place this piece? That would give me some hints. Not enough by far, but some.

    1. It still might not help you much to know, if you haven’t watched past Impulse, which was fairly early in Season 3. This story falls late in Season 4, between Bound and Demons. There were two mirror universe episodes between, in the series, and a span of time between the events of Bound, near Orion holdings, and Demons, at which time Enterprise was orbiting Earth.
      So my theory is that things are calm-ish in general – but not so calm where Trip and T’Pol are concerned, because they’ve just learned that they’re bound telepathically, and Trip transferred away and then came back, and that and the situation Enterprise was in have wreaked all kinds of havoc on her control…
      In terms you might be more familiar with, from other writings of mine: This scene takes place after the "murder mystery" in "Mission: Accomplished," and leads into "Scavenger Hunt."
      Sorry your head’s causing trouble. Mine’s been less than ideal the last couple of days,too.

    1. Yes, she might very well. Honestly, she’s got no business being even this far away from him, or being around anyone else. But she doesn’t really know that yet, and it’s not like there are a lot of options on an NX class starship….especially since she’s been adamant so far that they not tell Captain Archer the changed status of their relationship.
      If they were on Vulcan, though, they would have complete privacy until the changes were more established, and violent instinctive responses no longer likely.

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