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Inescapable Possibility: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

I have a confession to make.

I’m writing this post just past 6 am, on Thursday, July 7. Yup, that’s nearly a week before I want to post it.


Because this is a busy stretch of days, and the physical side of that can’t hold a candle to the emotional one. It begins tomorrow, when my daughter turns twelve. I’m still finding that almost impossible to believe!

Then, I have a busy blogging and writing weekend, with things all pretty much behind, at least as I type this, and a couple of dollops more in the way of necessary administrative duties than I’d like. Then, next week, my daughter has a vaccination appointment, the kitten goes to the vet –

And then it’s Wednesday.

And not just any Wednesday, either. Wednesday, July 13.

The day our second son, Elijah, was born.

He died twelve days later, in the NICU where he lived his entire post-birth life.

I don’t want to be writing these words, then, so I’ll write them now.

Elijah would be 13 this year. A teenager. But he’s not. 13 birthdays we didn’t get to share with him. That pain dulls, but never ever disappears.

Because I’m his mom, exactly as much as I am my older son’s, and my daughter’s.

And that makes sharing the last sentences of this scene more poignant, and maybe gives you a clue why Ava’s desire to live and die as she chooses is so important to me.

Elijah James Burton, July 13-25, 2003. Our Tiny Tiger at 6 days – halfway through his life.

Nuff said. Let’s rejoin Donovan Nash and Ava Garcia in Sea Changes.

Donovan is one of my favorite Kifo Island characters. He had a major supporting role in both of my previously drafted Kifo stories. Now, he gets his own (well, shared with Karina and Ava, but still, he’s finally the star he was always meant to be!)

The premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage is NaNo rough. My plan is to begin creating a revision plan beginning in August as the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group. Until then, I’m focused on new writing.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is July 13, 2016

  • I’ve got 3 sentences today, because I am the mother of three, blessed to raise two, and because that wraps up Donovan’s scene.

Donovan reads Ava’s medical records while she sleeps. Because it starts in media res; here’s the preceding paragraph, posted last week.

She sounded lucid, but was asleep within moments. Donovan watched her for a moment, marveling at how trusting she was, how willing to put her well-being and safety into the hands of a man she’d only just met. Of course, he wouldn’t have any idea how thoroughly she or her legal representatives had had him vetted unless she told him – she might know more about his work history than he even remembered. It wouldn’t be the first time.

Inescapable Possibility

Of course, there was another inescapable possibility, and that’s the one that kept him sitting on his heels for a long time, watching the sleeping child who would never become a woman, before he got up and went to begin reading her files.

She could simply be too sick to keep herself awake, and far too sick to protect herself, if she needed to.

When he began to read her dossier at last, that worry sharpened into a knife of apprehension.

What is so concerning to Donovan?

Are his concerns valid?

Next week, we shift to Ava’s point of view, and learn more.

To read Donovan’s scene in its entirety, just follow the links:

If you’re enjoying my Kifo Island posts, and would like to see the evolution of my two upcoming WIPs, The Far Shore and Tsunamis, I’ll eventually be posting an index for my Story a Day May 2016 vignettes. Until then, clicking the link will take you to the category, where you can play.

Want more WIPpets? You can find them, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined, by following the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet to WIPpet!


This song does me in….because it’s so perfectly expressed, and not unimaginable to me, or to many others. Warning – there may be tears. I went with the childlike animation because there are no clips from the show…and it seems fitting.


I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

7 thoughts on “Inescapable Possibility: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. Hi,
    I am sorry about your lost and i hope you are able to get through the day thinking of the time that you did have with your little tiger.

    As for your snippet, I read it with interest and now I am wondering what sharpened his worry.
    Shalom aleichem,

    1. I made it once more through Elijah’s Days, which ended on the 25, the 13th anniversary of his death. There was a lot of living, including a four-day camping trip in a neighboring state, during that time. Now I’m on the eve of my own birthday, the last big event in this emotionally eventful month, and I’m starting to breathe a little more freely.

      You’ll have to wait a while, I’m afraid, to learn just what made Donovan worry…but the answer will eventually be revealed in the finished product.

  2. The words… aren’t here now. And maybe they’ll never be here. I’ll be interested to know Ava’s side.

    And the song… I should have suspected you’d choose that one. But the child-like animation makes it all the more powerful.

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