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Never a Good Idea: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

I missed making the rounds last Wednesday. Sometimes, I think I’ve got all the time in the world, but then….I don’t.

Poof.

Just like that.

I know I made it to a couple of you, and maybe more, but my goal for this week is to get to everyone before the weekend. Now, I just need the calendar to clunk me on the head so I don’t forget again! =)

Right now, though, let’s rejoin Donovan Nash and Ava Garcia in Sea Changes.

Donovan is one of my favorite Kifo Island characters. He had a major supporting role in both of my previously drafted Kifo stories. Now, he gets his own (well, shared with Karina, and maybe Ava, but still, he’s finally the star he was always meant to be!)

For those who’ve forgotten, or are new to this story, here’s the premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage is NaNo rough. My plan is to begin creating a revision plan within the next few months. That said, any input is gratefully accepted!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is May 18, 2016
  • I‘ve got four short paragraphs today; adding the digits of the day (8+1=9), then subtracting the month (9-5=4.)

Donovan and Ava are exploring a possible working relationship. Ava’s spark of defiance makes Donovan start to love the young girl –

Never a Good Idea

It was never a good idea to get too emotionally involved – but something in the bits of her story that he’d already heard, and in her manner, endeared the child to him. If he took on her case, it was very likely he was going to come to love the dying girl.

He wrapped his arms about her slowly and gently, not squeezing, letting her move in or away as she wanted. Ava hiccupped her way to sniffles, and her head settled on his shoulder, her breath tickling his neck.

She stayed there for a count of one hundred sixteen, and then made a small restless movement away. Donovan let her go, but stayed where he was, in case she changed her mind, or needed more.

“Thanks,” she said. “I really, really needed that. My folks – well, they’re not exactly the affectionate type.”

Will the hug prove dangerous?

Can Donovan make up for Ava’s affection deficit?

Will they be able to work together?

What’s next?

Some of these questions may be answered – and others will certainly be posed- next week, so be sure to come back then to learn more of Donovan’s story.

To read Donovan’s scene in its entirety, just follow the links:

A friendly reminder:

I know some of you love my Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction. During April’s Blogging From A to Z Challenge, T’Pol and Trip got some much-needed attention. You can read the results at the brand-new index post! You can also visit my fanfiction.net page, and find extended versions of each story. Yup! After years of dreaming about sharing my passion, my Trek stories are out there in the big wide world! =)

Want more WIPpets? You can find them, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined, by following the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet to WIPpet!

 

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

5 thoughts on “Never a Good Idea: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. That hug sounds like it is going to lead to affection between the both and open up a bottle of emotions that both of them will have to deal with.
    Shalom aleichem,
    Patricia

    1. He’s a real sweetie. Might be just a bit too sweet and willing to take care of others at his own expense, but we’ll have to see about that as we go on.

  2. Aw, this is very sweet. I like how much Donavan lets Ava take the lead. Just making sure I’ve got everything straight because I’ve missed a few weeks as well – Ava is the dying girl mentioned in the summary? And Karina(?) is the one who was doing the pottery when she met Donovan?

    1. Yes, Ava is the dying girl, and Karina was hating the clay when Donovan caught her interest. =)

      And Donovan is definitely the type not to force affection on anyone. He also seems to read people very well when they’re vulnerable.

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