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Even More Helpless: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

Happy Wednesday!

Life is settling back into a more typical routine. Last week, I managed to get round to see all my fellow WIPpeteers, which was something of a minor victory for me. Despite the return to greater normalcy, there have been a couple of surprises.

My son and I went out yesterday, and our quest to obtain Mew Event Cards for himself, his sister, and a friend. That became a bit more convoluted than I’d hoped, but we had a nice lunch at The Cheesecake Factory, and I got to see again how much my fourteen-year-old has grown. These one-on-one times with him are treasures I know are going to become more rare and precious with the passing of time. He’s a lot closer to an adult than to a child, now, and I’m glad we’re friends. I also bought a meditation coloring book, just because I wanted it.

I’ll be heading out later this afternoon to help a friend pick up her new car. I feel a little invested in this process, since her previous car broke down fortuitously, and rather humorously, in the parking lot of the Denny’s where we have our weekly write-ins. I was in the passenger seat; we started car pooling a few weeks back.

So, depending upon how long it takes me to finish setting up and polishing this post, it will either be up in the next couple of hours, or later this evening. Whichever that is, we’re revisiting Karina Karanova in Sea Changes.

For those who’ve forgotten, or are new here, the premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage is NaNo rough. My plan is to begin creating a revision plan this month or next. That said, any input is gratefully accepted!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 10, 2016.
  • I’ve added the month and the date: 10+2=12.
  • Today, you get twelve new sentences.

Context: Karina is in a pottery studio, working with clay and hating it, when an albino man sits near her, and begins a conversation. He’introduces himself as Donovan Nash, and they begin a tentative conversation as Karina’s frustration and distraction lead her to unintentionally destroy the project her mother has ordered her to make. Donovan asks if that was her intention, and their discussion brings Karina to tears, and triggers memories….

Even More Helpless

“I need you, Karina. It’s your duty. Take care of the shop; take care of your brothers and your sisters; take care of me; take care of the house and the car.” And so, she had.

But now she was sobbing, here in front of this strangest of strangers, a man with no pigment, a man she didn’t even know. Unacceptable – and unstoppable.

The fact that she couldn’t stop had Karina sobbing all the harder. Lost. She was lost –

She channeled that into rage, the same way Father always had. She had no children – where would she have found the time for more than a passing smile, these last years, let alone all the other things that would have had to happen if she was to bear a child of her own? How would she have been able to find the time or the energy, to care for one more- one even more helpless than Mother?

Will Karina find some degree of peace?

Does she want a child?

Will she ever have the opportunity to have one?

How will Donovan react to her tears?

Some of these questions may be answered – and others will certainly be posed- next week, so be sure to come back then to learn more about Karina and her story.

Previous Karina WIPpets (chronologically):

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I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

14 thoughts on “Even More Helpless: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

    1. Karina has definitely had something of a hard life.

      My teen actually enjoys those one-on-one times, even if he also enjoys lots of time to himself. It was interesting to see him in a nice restaurant that we went to because he’s no longer nearly so fond of fast food.

    1. I spend so much time with my kids, and yet their growing up still seems to sneak up on me in these odd moments…

      Karina, as you might guess, is full of those too-long dammed emotions, and the time may just have come for them to start pouring over the barriers she’s set….

  1. Poor Karina. I’d like to give her a hug, though I’m not much of a hugger. But, I know that feeling of when the tears start and you want to stop them from rolling you over and that only makes them come faster.

    Great snippet

    1. Karina’s not much of a hugger, either. I think she’d be happy if you could just pretend you can’t see or feel her pain.

      I love the way you describe that particular kind of crying. Karina hates this, but I think she needs it, too.

  2. Ah, poor Karina! She has much to work through and get past. I will guess her new friend is going to help with that, even though I don’t believe she would think of him as a friend at this point.

    1. I’m not sure she’s ever had a friend, really…and she certainly doesn’t see him as a friend right now…maybe more like an irritant who’s bringing up all those things she doesn’t want to feel.

      We’ll have to see if he turns out to be a helpful irritant…and she definitely does have a great deal to work through and get past, if she can.

    1. She got a very snazzy and very blue little Caddy (she had a De Ville, which broke down while we were carpooling, so I had a vested interest in helping her get the new one home.

      As for my Boyo – he’s amazing. Almost half a head taller than me at 14 – and I’m rather tall. He’s so much closer to a man than a boy, really, and I’m cherishing this time with him.

      I’ll gratefully accept hugs, but Karina…they really aren’t her thing. She’d rather no one know she’s not strong enough right know to hide her pain….a little like a couple of other ladies I know.

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