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The Shadows of Hawks: Something New for #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all, or pick a few like leftover New Year’s treats….

And, if you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

This week, I offer you nine sentences of “A Splash of Red”, a surreal fantasy story, the child of my own life and my dreams, with a generous dollop of imagery and a big dash of creative license…

More on the story after the snippet.

The Shadows of Hawks

She stops circling, and stares at me. I keep my gaze open and soft – I want her to feel safe here. But there are the shadows of hawks in her eyes as she shrugs. “Gravity still happens.” Through her fierceness, the single quick ray of amusement at her own joke. “And it was you who upset my balance. All of a sudden, just when I needed to focus on the hawk, you were here.”

I feel the words, heavy with meaning, like the heaviness in the air before snow, like the heaviness of the hawk wheeling in the hopeful sky, vivid with sharp menace. She goes back to her own circling, watching me warily, as though she thinks me the hawk.

Does the child think the woman is a hawk?

Is she right?

Can the woman make her feel safe?

And what about the hawk?

Come on back next week to find out more!

Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review, which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

That being said, I’d love any and all input and criticism you’re inclined to offer!

Want more #8Sunday?


I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

14 thoughts on “The Shadows of Hawks: Something New for #WeWriWa #8Sunday

    1. Welcome to the world in my head, Rachel! This one’s based on my own life, and a dream…and my dreams are rich in imagery.

      I hope you visit again, and enjoy it even more! =)

    1. Thanks, Veronica! Stories born out of dreams seem to have a quality all their own, don’t they?

      Hawks figured rather large in my childhood, so it seemed natural to have them here…

    1. *blushes*

      Thank you, Christina!

      I want to make the opening a little clearer, but I’m more than a little stumped about how to do that. That’s one of the reasons I’m sharing it here. =)

    1. Well, if you love both – then you score doubly! =D

      It tickles me that you love my original work, as well. Trip and T’Pol (with a generous dollop of Spock, because he was my first Vulcan) aren’t going anywhere. For so long, I hid my fanfic away, and almost no one ever saw it. It’s a thrill every single time I share, because I’m claiming my passion for them.

      Yet, I write many other things, too…and more of those will eventually find their way to #8sunday.

  1. Is this the opening section? Because where it starts, I’m not sure what’s going on. Your writing is evocative though, and I feel it would pull me right in once I understand the context. Always nice to see new fiction from you!

    1. It is the beginning – and the story itself is surreal. It’s a combination of a dream and my own life, with a lot of imagery added in.

      I agree that the beginning is a little vague and abstract. I’ve played around with it, but don’t have an ideal solution just yet. It may always be vague…

      Happy that you enjoyed it, though. Maybe this week’s installment will help you enter the story…and thank you for the honest feedback – it’s very helpful! =)

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