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First Ripening: Foul Deeds Will Rise (Trueborn Weft Series #2) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It’s hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys! She‘s our fearless shepherd…or something like that, anyway

Hi there! Guess what? Nah, I can’t wait; I’ve got to tell you!

I’m on track to finish 75,000 words of Foul Deeds Will Rise, the latest in my Trueborn Weft fantasy series, by the end of the month! Since I finished plotting, and began drafting, at 5am on Saturday, July 11, and since I’ve moved from not quite 14,000 words when I posted last week’s WIPpet, to just over 53,000 at my last count, I’m a bit stunned to be able to say that!

I may need to complete the draft next month – it’s looking to be closer to 100K than 75K, maybe even a little more than that. But that’s OK- I’ve made a solid entry into this novel, and I have at least a shape and outline of what’s to come, even though the characters have their own ideas (usually better than mine, and so worth going with…).

Note: This snippet is NaNo – rough….

Here’s the premise for FDWR – and a list of links to the previous posts from this novel-in-the-making….

A young exile who loses everything she values reinvents her life in effort to save both her peoples from her vengeful half-twin.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is July 22, 2015.
  • I offer you 22 sentences.

Before you read on, a disclaimer:

This scene is intended for adults only.

It is rated strongly R for sexual content;

in addition, it contains potentially triggering material.

If these aren’t your cup of tea, this might be a good post to skip – I’ll understand.

First Ripening

He groaned and clutched at her, the release painful, powerful, potent.

So very potent – more potent than he had been in ages; in tens of lifetimes of these short-lived beings who surrounded him.

He had forgotten the bliss and ecstasy of Matehunt, the force and pleasure of the seed springing forth from him, hot and strong, his blood seeking the egg of a willing woman’s Line, to create a new life…

He had forgotten, but now, as she tangled around him, claiming him, her mind filled with images of the other, her ill-gotten Otherworld mate, a mate she could not touch, had never touched, Tacivaar remembered –

It had never been so, before. So transforming, so consuming…

Never had he felt a woman so open, so willing, so eager to accept him, to make him her own.

She was his blood, and she was ripe.

She thought him the usurper she named Kaivelt, and she hungered for him, starved for him – used him to hide from what she had done in her maddened escape from the maze, from Kaitiiraan –

She was rid of the Kai. She would be Kai, now. And he, as her Solemate, as the giver of the blood that ran in her veins, would be hers, and he would have the power of what he gave her –

He was her Huntleader.

Even if she didn’t yet know it, he was also her mate.

Kaivelt, far back, lost in his own madness, knew what was being taken. He roused himself to fight for his child-mate – but he was easily swatted aside, now, and she, thinking herself with the boy she craved and had Hunted most of her living, did nothing, in her madness, to defend him, or to deny her Huntleader.

She was ripe. It was in her scent, and in her manner, in the way her body clung to his, would not release him, arched up when she was beneath, talons digging into his hips, instinctively demanding that he seed her. It was her first ripening; no other had laid claim, because she would accept no offer, and because none would dare make one. His seed had none other to compete with. She urged him, tightened around him, clenched her thighs, so that he could not have escaped her if he wanted to. She arched to him, rose into every thrust, every touch. She cried out her release, and she was open, so open.

What exactly is happening here, and why?

I’ll be posting the next few lines from this scene for #8sunday,  if you’d like to learn more…

Looking for WIPpet Snippets where a little more is explained, and a little less revealed? You can find those, or add your own date-related excerpt, by following the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet!



I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

13 thoughts on “First Ripening: Foul Deeds Will Rise (Trueborn Weft Series #2) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. I could have sworn I’d commented on this before… *scratches head*

    Content aside (poor girl, to have this moment stolen from her!–and her poor partner too!), your writing is so beautifully lyrical. It does a lot to drive home the horror of it, actually, such a cruel act in such beautiful phrasing.

    It’s frustrating when characters decide things you find distasteful, isn’t it? I’ve had a couple like that, where I’ve just sat shaking my head at the page… They do give us some very odd worries, don’t they?

    1. Maybe you did – it’s been a bit of whirlwind, this month…I’ll peek back, next week, and see if I can figure out what happened to it….

      The theft of this moment is going to have huge repercussions, going forward, and not just for her. Her mate is going to have to deal with this too, and that isn’t going to be any easier for him – and, in some ways, more difficult.

      I’m blushing a little at your lovely compliments. What a wonderful birthday gift! =D

      Tacivaar experiences this as a lyrical, divine, beautiful experience – centuries in the making… I do NOT like what he’s doing here, but I understand his rationale, and, by his own standards, he’s really only taking her back from an Otherworld mate who usurped his prior claim to her…never mind that she’s not interested in anyone but Kaivelt..

      .Howard was more than frustrating – he’s downright disturbing. More so because there are too many people who share his sense of entitlement…

      Indeed they do give us odd troubles, these people in our heads!

  2. NIcely written to present a completely alien POV, Shan. I know you (and certain characters who you clearly don’t want mentioned, or you likely would have mentioned yourself) don’t think it’s a good thing Tacivaar is doing, but… playing the devil’s advocate here, I can see how blood could call to blood and demand submission.

    That said… the fact that he is hiding behind her desire for another IS appalling. There are worse things than physical rape and assault. To deny someone reliance on their own mind is… horrific. That’s what bothers me about this scene emotionally. I think it needed to be written, but it is definitely horrific

    1. Oh, yes – his invasion into her Solemating is the greater crime by far, here. It robs her (and, eventually, him) of so much.

      It doesn’t help anything that this isn’t the first time, by far, that he’s attacked this bond in some way, simply because he doesn’t recognize it as a valid connection, and he wants her for his own, feels that she IS his own, for the claiming…

      What’s the oddest about his attitude to me is that he knows just how wild his blood is, and he knew who Kaitiiraan was, and it ought to be obvious that any child born of her Line and his blood was NOT going to respond any better to his demands than she did to her mother’s…

    2. The invasion of her Solemating is definitely the larger offense, here – the damage and repercussions are enormous, and they’ll escalate in dangerous ways….

      No, I’m not ready to reveal who all the players are, or might be, at least not for quite a while….so thanks for ‘keeping the secret’ until the time comes…

      And you’re right. This is horrific….and not, sadly, the worst of it…

    1. I thought you might skip this one. I think it was a wise choice. I had to write the scene, because it’s rather integral to the plot, but it may end up differently by the final draft…

      What this character does is heinous, and there’s no point sugar-coating it, especially since it will have far-reaching implications and consequences that drive several characters through at least this volume and the next, and possibly further.

      I kind of wish these people would not shove their way into my head, proudly proclaiming their transgressions, and demand I tell their stories faithfully, from their perspectives, as though they’ve done nothing wrong…

      It’s icky.

      I’ll try to always place a warning for THOSE snippets that makes it clear what’s coming- this character might not mind traumatizing people, but I would just as soon NOT.

      And I happen to think you’re a great writer, too! =D

    1. The climax of Book One, The Stars Are Fire, actually….I don’t think I’ve shared many or any WIPpets from that one…but, since it’s tentatively on my revision docket for 2016, you may be seeing enough of it to get a sense for what might happen at the end.

      It IS intense, and the sex really is the least of the things that’s intense about it. There will be many consequences and changes born of this interaction…and they’ll stretch over a significant amount of time…

  3. Very intriguing snippet, Shan, and not just because of the sex! *g* I’m curious to find out how this apparent mind-melding (it that’s what it is) fits in with mating in your world, and what happened to Kalvelt. Kudos!

    1. It’s not mind-melding…mind-melding is a conscious discipline, considered to be intimate and subject to strong moral codes.

      What this is is the Huntthread. for Tacivaar and the very young woman he’s perpetrating this sexual ruse upon, it’s an instinctive and intuitive part of their culture. The Hunttthread binds the members of their Tribe together in an ever shifting network of minds, which lends a certain cohesion to the group and culture as a whole – if all is well….

      However, this connection can also be dangerous , as it is here, because it makes those in it vulnerable to attacks from within.

      Since Tacivaar doesn’t accept her mate as valid, he more or less superimposes himself on her awareness of Kaivelt – which is in part due to the Huntthread, but also something else…no person from either her world or his has ever touched a mind at such a distance…and most certainly not with enough strength and precision to form a bond of this intensity…

      I’m only going to say that the Huntthread adds a very complex element to Matehunt, that this type of telerotic activity is extremely important to Kaivelt, as well –

      And that things aren’t going particularly well for him on his world just now, either….but that is another story! =D

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