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“Proof Enough Already”: Foul Deeds Will Rise (Trueborn Weft Series #2) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.

It’s hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys! She’s our fearless shepherd…or something like that, anyway…

Hi there! Ready for something brand new?

I hope so, because today I’m sharing from Foul Deeds Will Rise, the latest in my Trueborn Weft fantasy series – it’s been quite a while since I’ve played here. I’ve finally finished plotting, and the writing has commenced to the tune of nearly 14,000 words – since 5am Saturday! Yes, I was more than ready to write!

I expect that number to climb precipitously over the next few days, as we’ve got nothing scheduled, and, while I was at my CampNaNo  write-in last night, my Accomplice was here at home cleaning the kitchen and ‘making our nest nestier’, as he put it, so that I can focus on writing today.

Have I ever mentioned that I love this man?! Well, even if I have, it bears repeating.

I love him. ❤

Here’s the premise for FDWR – and that’s all I’m sharing as far as intro, for now… this one’s better if you need to guess a little!

A young exile who loses everything she values reinvents her life  to save both her peoples from her vengeful half-twin.

Okay, so here we go…

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is July 15, 2015.
  • I offer you 15 sentences. If you happen to count more than that, perhaps it’s camouflage…

“Proof Enough Already”

“How are we to know that you are speaking truth?”

The eldest had hands to hips, chin thrust out, as though she had no fear. But Vaara could smell the stink of it like a miasma in the room, and it was most powerful from this woman. So, she was skilled at camouflage, but mayhap not nearly so skilled as she thought herself.

“I can easily prove the truth of my words, if you doubt them.”

She gave no signal that she scented the fear, and answered instead as though this Untribed had some ability to approve or deny her place here. Camouflage was nature, to her, a means of procuring meat enough to survive, and to live another day in places where such things were far from certain. This soft creature had not even a nursling whelp’s skill, in such arts, and it was writ large in the tiny things her kind seemed never to take any notice of.

“We’ve seen proof enough already that she is who she says she is.” The from the one who smelled least of fear, though she seemed also huddled in on herself, and focused on the stack of scrolls and books she held upon her lap. Now this one bore watching, and tending to. “I’ve got seven documents that state her existence beyond doubt, and twelve more that suggest Niaan had a twin, said to have died, or vanished. And then there’s Rachyl’s sensates…” She waved a hand stained in inkberry vaguely at the banks of plants near the windows.

“If Niaan were still about, she would be here to explain,” said the one named Rachyl. Her clear eyes, the same shade as the mossoak leaves when they first burst forth from their bud casings, were shadowed in concerns – but honest ones. It had been she who hadn’t quailed at the body when Vaara dragged it within, but had simply pronounced Herself absolutely dead.

What are these women seeking proof of?

Who is Vaara, and what is her place here?
For that matter, who is Niaan, and where is she?

And what’s all this about a body, anyway?

I’ll be posting the next few lines from this scene for #8sunday, if you’d like to learn more…and it looks like at least some of these characters certainly would like to…

Looking for WIPpet Snippets where a little more is explained?

You can find those, or add your own date-related excerpt, by following the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet!


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24 thoughts on ““Proof Enough Already”: Foul Deeds Will Rise (Trueborn Weft Series #2) for WIPpet Wednesday

  1. Wow, that’s a lot of writing you got done! I’d definitely say it was more than ready to make itself known on the page. 🙂

    And I want to find out more! It ends right where I didn’t want it to! *grins* I love how Vaara assesses them all so calmly, despite having turned up with a dead body. She seems an impressive girl for sure…

    1. SO glad I left you wanting more! *evil writer laugh*

      Vaara is absolutely impressive. She didn’t make this body a body, but it is her proof, and at the heart of her story…

      Yup – when the characters have things to say, I’d durned well better get my hands on the keyboard and let them at it! =D

    1. It’s a rather confusing time for everyone involved – it’s not every day that a strange woman comes into your home in the shape of a wolf, dragging your mother’s body, and telling you she’s your sister, and your leader….

  2. I know what happened. I know what happened…..

    *puts finger to lips and pretends to seal them a la Kindergarten* I’ll be good and not say. Though… Vaara is definitely more ‘social’ than I would have expected from her. I don’t see her getting along well with the eldest, even though I doubt your eldest is quite the same woman as she was when we first dreamed up these ladies. (Then again L’Tria isn’t what I imagined her to be. Konii… I can so see her becoming something incredible.)

    1. Ahh, there’s another thing that my kids have “missed out on”….they don’t know that little trick…

      Vaara is – not as social as she might seem, here. There are things she needs to say, and she has strong motivation to say them….but her deeper nature will reassert itself.

      Aliaan…well, I’m still learning about Aliaan. She figures in this story, but she’s more ‘below the radar’, so to speak.

      About Konii, though – you might or might not be right! =)

      1. I get what you mean in your description of Vaara, but I didn’t mean she was social as in aware of social cues (except the underlying cues we all notice but try to pretend we don’t). I meant social in the sense that she feels inspired to deal with these other women to get what she wants.

        As for Konii, I can see it being possible, but… this isn’t my story. I am just seeing possibilities. 🙂

        1. I don’t think she feels inspired, as much as she’s walked into the Keep, and they’ve challenged her right to be there.

          So, it’s more that dealing with them is necessary, more than a matter of choice. I mean, she can force her right to be there, but she’s going to have a very difficult time assuming her place as Kai without a certain amount of cooperation from those around her. Being a pragmatist to the Nth degree, she’s willing to do what is needed to get there.

          And Konii is definitely an interesting character. She surprised me considerably in Book One, and is continuing the trend in this one, too.

  3. I am a little lost. :-/ I’m really behind, though. And I am intrigued, lost or not. 🙂 I like the lady with the scrolls. Not terribly concerned because she’s done her research, but not about to give the speaker a free ride, either. Sounds like my kind of gal. 🙂

    1. Everybody’s more than a little lost at this point – except perhaps for Konii, the lady with the scrolls. You’ve pinned her personality better than most of those who ought to know her better.

      I think you’re going to like her. She surprised the bleep out of me! =)

      This is the first week I’ve shared from this brand-new WIPpet. I did share the first scene last Saturday (I think I put the link in this post)…but I gave Trip and T’Pol a turn for a couple of weeks – they were rather insistent…

        1. On the plus side, they aren’t long. July is – tricky – for me, emotionally. No energy for long and involved WIPpets….

          I so hear you about the reading. I recently told the kids I;d like to clone myself – one for reading, one for writing, one for hugging….

          1. Right? One for teaching, one for cleaning, one for making pretty things… Or super speed. MAN, could I use some super speed. And think of all the calories I would burn! I could eat nice cream every stinkin’ meal and stay healthy.

          2. LOL! I am going to put my computer at the island in the kitchen, to see how it works as a standing desk…that will stretch and use my muscles a little bit…

            Super speed might make me dizzy, though…

          3. That’s wonderful! For me, though, it might not work, since I generally walk on the treadmill at between 3 and 3.3 mph or so…and I work out at the Y.

            But that’s where I watch a lot of Enterprise, so it’s not exactly wasted time! =)

  4. Aah… very intriguing. You’ve got me hooked because there are too many questions floating around my brain that need answering.

    1. My work here is done, then! =D

      Send the monkeys, if you must, but could you ask them to wait a few hours so I can sleep before they chain me to my laptop and beat me? ;D

      These are definitely interesting people, with interesting – issues….

  5. Interesting stuff. I know the tone is totally different, but when you say absolutely dead it reminded me of Miracle Max from the Princess Bride. 🙂

    Horray for the nesting accomplice! Do you find you nest before you start a project? I sometimes do.

    1. It’s been too long since I’ve seen The Princess Bride…

      But, yes, different tone. This absolutely dead body happens to be throatless…

      I do nest sometimes, but this is the last of four straight months of creative challenges, so I’m a bit tired. It’s also July, which is emotionally tricky.

      So his thoughtful gesture meant even more. I may have cried when I came home and saw all he did.

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