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Spinning: WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It’s hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys! She may be less physically present for a bit, but she’s still our fearless shepherd…or something like that, anyway.

I‘ve got another snippet from The IDIC Romance stories; as part of my Story a Day May challenge. Read the full story or explore others in this series.

These stories are Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction, dealing with the inter-species relationship between T’Pol, a Vulcan scientist, and Trip Tucker, the extremely human Chief Engineer…

Disclaimers:

  • Trip, T’Pol, and Star Trek: Enterprise belong to Paramount, even if Paramount has forgotten all about them…
  • This is an extrapolated “missing scene” story, detailing some of what might have happened during the months’ long and scarcely shown return to Earth in S2E26 “The Expanse”. Spoilers for that episode; mild spoilers for S2E1: Shockwave: Part II.

This snippet is rated PG-13 for adult language and situations.

This snippet follows a few paragraphs after Sticking to the Plan. Trip has gotten some very bad news from back home, and the ship is months away from Earth. Relieved of duty and out of options, he sees only one way to ease the pain – by getting good and drunk and staying that way.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is May 20, 2015.
  • I added the day (20), to its numerological value (2+0=2).
  • 22 mostly drunkenly short, only marginally coherent sentences, where Trip trips all over his thoughts, and his room…

Spinning 

You look at the bottles. Never thought you’d go through so many. You never much liked to drink alone. Your eyes go to the picture. You tried turning it upside down; you tried to put it in a drawer. Three weeks is a long time to try not to look at something, when it’s all you can think about. 

You’re tired. Exhausted. You stagger to your bed, pretending it’s not because you haven’t been sober since – awww, hell, since when? Since it had been long enough to be almost sure –

Almost. Filthiest word of ‘em all, almost. All. Most.

You fall on the bed; lie on your back, but the ceiling’s spinning. “Cap’n on the ceiling,” you say, and giggle. But it’s not funny, the spinning, any more than the Captain on the ceiling was for Miss Points’N’Logic. “She was my Cinderella. Now she’s the Evil Stepmother.” 

Logic. Damn her. Damn logic, the dirty word.

Why is Trip drinking? What’s he trying so hard to not think about? Why doesn’t he want to see that picture?

And, maybe most importantly, where, oh, where, does he come up with these nicknames for T’Pol?!

Because, I gotta say, ‘Miss Points’N’Logic’ has got to be one of my all-time favorites!

What will happen next?

  • There will be another post from the original story, Sticking Point for #8sunday
  • There’s now a sequel! In Pillow Talk? Trip wakes up in a compromising position…and that’s only the first surprise of this strange morning.

Looking for more WIPpet Snippets? Something less drunken, perhaps? Well, hop along with the little blue froggy; assorted genres, styles, and lengths of WIPpetty lily-pads to choose from! =D

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

35 thoughts on “Spinning: WIPpet Wednesday

  1. “Three weeks is a long time to try not to look at something, when it’s all you can think about.” Awesome line.

    Yes, I, too, would like to know what’s got him so deep in his cups. They whys and wherefores. Poor Trip. He’s going to feel even worse come morning.

    1. Something horrible has happened on Earth – an unexplained attack. Trip’s home, and someone he deeply loves, might not be there anymore – and he’s way too far away to easily find out, let alone get home to see (if there’s a home to see, which he doesn’t know…).

      The next morning – well, that’s going to be a whole other kettle of fish…he wakes up feeling worse, and better, because reasons…reasons you have to wait till Wednesday to learn a bit more about, because I haven’t dared any flying monkeys in a while, and sometimes a woman’s just gotta live dangerously, y’know?! =)

  2. Haha! You know, I don’t usually like second person POV, but I do like it as a character development tool. I think switching viewpoints around now and then, just to check in, so to speak, is a good idea. And I love that you picked drunk Trip for this one. It’s amusing how he thinks of words like “Almost” and “Logic.” I have to agree with him on the first one, at least 😉

    1. One of the things I love about Story a Day May is the prompts – they really stretch me, and help me to see my characters and stories in deeper, more textured ways…I grow as a writer and a person, every year I participate.

      As for “picking” drunk Trip – well, not so much. It’s more like he thrust himself into my head, and said, “I’m drunk and lost and hurting more than I ever thought I could and you gotta help me by telling everybody all about it, and you gotta do it RIGHT NOW, because I’m so broken, so stupid-drunk, that I’m kinda afraid of myself and what I might do…”

      He went on for quite a while like that. And Trip can be very convincing, whether drunk or sober…

      I’m hoping I was able to help a little – in this story, and the two that followed. I think maybe I did.

      I hope so. Because this whole situation really, really sucks for him right now… and it’s bigger than he can handle all alone.

        1. Exactly. Trip needs someone to take care of him, help him pull out of this spiral, give him something to care about, because he’s seriously floundering, here…

          Let’s hope ‘someone’ shows up….

  3. I’ll state that this style of PoV can be hit or miss for me. Today, it was a hit. Maybe it’s my D&D playing side. I don’t just play D&D, but sometimes I play games based on licensed things like BUFFY and be Buffy. So, when I read this, I think I slipped into such a mindset.

    I feel you handled it very well. Not pushing feelings too hard and not over loading the sensory stuff. I started feeling like I was indeed spinning and a little melancholy. Great job 🙂

    1. Happy and I little sorry I could give you the spins that way…I seldom drink at all anymore, and never to excess, but that was one of my least favorite things about over-indulging in the days when I did…

      I don’t usually write in second person POV, but it does seem to work best for me when the character is in an altered state. Glad Trip’s inner chaos came through without being overwhelming.

    1. He’s kind of funny most of the time – but here – I want to hug him and tell him it’ll be all right – but, since I might be lying, I think I’ll wait and see what happens.

      He’s rather taken with the nickname, too – and, of course, even when he won’t admit it, the lady he gave it to!

  4. It’s a “me thing”, but… I hate reading things in the 2nd person immediate POV. The scene itself is a lot of fun (of course, after sharing dinner and YMCA time last night, I had spoilers), but I had to fight myself to read it (as much as I had to fight myself to listen to it) just because of the POV.

    And… I don’t think I’ve heard a nickname for T’Pol that Trip’s come up with that I dislike.

    1. Ahhh, sweetie- you could have said so, and spared yourself the pain!

      The second-person POV was the prompt, and I kind of love what emerges with it, although I seem only to use it for scenes where my POV character is seriously altered.

      But it brings up things that stay hidden in other POVs, and seems to lend itself to poetic imagery and cool nicknames….

      But, like so many things, it’s a matter of preference.

    1. Thanks! The story originated with a Stream-of-Consciousness prompt, “Stick”.

      Whenever I use my SoCS post for fiction, really cool stuff surfaces, stuff I might not have gotten any other way.

  5. Miss Points’N’Logic is definitely one of the better nicknames for T’Pol. I have to say, I’m a bit disappointed in Trip, getting drunk like that. Doesn’t he know there are more constructive ways to deal with OUCH! He could write about it, or paint something, or even take up gourmet candy making and stuff himself with his own artful creations…

    1. Well, to be fair to Trip – this is catastrophic news, he doesn’t know for sure what’s happened, and he DID try to be constructive by “Upgrading” the engines.

      He’s not much of a writer, our Trip. Not a painter, or a chef, either. He likes to deal with precision machinery, and complicated women. Neither is exactly an option right now.

      He likes to play his harmonica, and take pictures of people he cares about, but both of those are trigger minefields right now, for Reasons.

      Oh, and he likes to collect alcohol. He’s not feeling social enough to gather right now, and the reason he was collecting- well, it might just have vanished.

      So, instead, he’s consuming. Maybe not so constructive – but it makes a certain amount of sense given his helplessness, his rudderlessness, the inability to get there faster and KNOW –

      What he believes he needs right now is to be numb. And, for that, the alcohol is a pretty good solution – at least as he sees things right now…

      He’d like you to know that he knows he’s probably being a fool, and he’s a little sad to have let you down, but he’s only human, and right now he’s fallen about as low as he’s ever been, and he’s lost. He really needs someone to step in and take care of him for a while – just a little while- so that he can figure out how to live through the next few months….until he can DO something.

      1. Awwww. Poor Trip. I shall bake him some cookies. … Or not. My husband just informed me I’m not allowed to give cookies to other men. In lieu of cookies, I shall refer him to the local gymnasium where he may find a buddy and physical outlet in the form of exercise.

        1. At the moment, he says that if he tries to work out, he’s definitely going to live up to his nickname…but maybe tomorrow, or the next day, if he can stand the pain of being sober….

          But it would be easier if someone would just take over for a bit, so he doesn’t have to try to think when he’s trying so hard NOT to think, or feel…

          He always thought he was strong, until this – but this is stronger than he is…at least, it is right now…

          1. Strength is only strong until something stronger comes along, and there’s always something stronger. :-/ Poor Trip, though. That’s a hard lesson to learn.

    1. You might be delighted to know that I’ve decided to stick with this arc at least for next week’s WIPpet and #8sunday posts, Fallon – and that knowing how much you like drunk Trip has something to do with it!

        1. I wish you much pleasure with Enterprise, and I’ll try not to keep asking where you are.

          They are lots of fun to watch, aren’t they? The directors did a fantastic job of building the relationship in a sometimes blatant, sometimes subtle, way… kind of the way a real one goes, but with that cool interspecies, hard-headed thing….

    1. He really is in a bad way. Wish I could say that it ends quickly or well – but, well, I’m not telling, or at least not here and not yet…

      It is possible, however that there may be comfort of an unlikely nature offered from an unlikely source…

      Maybe it won’t be enough to fix things- but sometimes, it’s just getting through RIght Now….

      At least he’s a reasonably witty drunk…with a knack for names! =D

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