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WIPpet Wednesday: “Kroykah?”


Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It is hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys!

Ever feel like you’re riding high, on top of everything, and then – splat! – something topples you back to Earth with a rude and teeth-jarring jolt?

I shut down and restarted my laptop yesterday – and, when I pulled up my Scrivener project to work on revisions for upcoming WIPpets – Tigress T’Pol was gone. Every other story seems to be just fine; but this one is missing – from the binder, and from my Dropbox files. It’s not in my Recycle Bin either- it’s as though it never existed!

So, where I thought I was ready to edit the next several WIPpets, I’ll be re-creating them, instead. It’s not a huge deal; I know what direction I was taking, and the original version is still on my Story-a-Day blog, and I have all the edits up to this point in previous posts. Some of them changed as I was posting, so it’s more up-to-date than the Scrivener file.

There’s a good chance that the new ending will be better than the edits would have been, so this may turn out to have been one of those annoying-but-ultimately positive things. Still, though, I’d love the opinion of a certain Chief Engineer….oh, wait – he’s got his arms extremely full of the Science Officer right now…and they’re both a little busy…

In other news, I had the honor of sharing fellow WIPpeteer Amy Mitchell’s cover reveal and book goodies on Monday. I can’t wait to find out more about Phin and Alex and the sizzling going on between them….!

And one last tidbit before we go back to spying on the interspecies hanky-panky in the cell. I’m taking an online course at FutureLearn Shakespeare and His World. It’s for fun, and also research for Chameleon’s Dish, which will be returning after we reach the end of this story and find out if Trip and T’Pol ever get out of that Suliban lockup, and if Trip manages to practice chivalry with a Vulcan woman who doesn’t quite grasp the concept…

And, speaking of our incendiary duo….

Here’s another snippet from The IDIC Romance, my Story A Day May Challenge project. This is a Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction, exploring the interspecies relationship of T’Pol and Trip.

For those keeping track:

This is the fourteenth installment of Story #4, “Tigress T’Pol” . The prompt was to write a story of exactly 2000 words. An additional guest prompt from Heidi Durrow invited us to explore passion in this story.

Disclaimer: T’Pol, Trip, and all the rest of Star Trek are property of CBS/Paramount; no copyright infringement intended. I just want to play with them, and I’m careful!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is October 1, 2014.
  • 18 sentences for the day, (10+1+2+0+1+4=18)

This story is an add-on scene for the pilot episode: “Broken Bow Part 1”. I’ve done my best to extrapolate without violating series canon.

This snippet follows immediately after last week’s WIPpet, Fierce Impact. Trip is trying to help T’Pol regain her control, while she seems to have another goal entirely…

Kroykah?” Mercifully, T’Pol stopped moving as she echoed my word, and let go of my fingers, the plasma-current of sharing cutting off almost painfully. “Don’t you desire me?”

She was still flushed and quivering, and her heart beat against my belly, impossibly strong and fast, like she had a hummingbird Godzilla trapped inside her. Her voice was breathily husky, her eyes wide and dilated, but her tone and the almost pleading way she looked at me reminded me of Lizzie when she was little and had gotten in trouble without understanding what she’d done wrong. Damn, was there something twisted in T’Pol reminding me of my baby sister while she was straddling me and still looking so deliciously frenzied?

Instead of thinking about that, I chuckled and kissed the tip of her nose, hoping it wasn’t some Vulcan erogenous zone that would get us right back into trouble again. “Oh, woman, I desire all kinds of things. I’m pretty sure you can feel that for yourself.” She wasn’t moving, anymore, but she was still laying on me; no way she couldn’t tell just how aroused I was. ”But you – you didn’t expect to react this way, did you? It -” I tried to figure out how to say what I’d felt, in the sharing. “It seemed like you were overwhelmed and scared and fighting yourself- and that’s not the way I wanna do this, if we do it.”

T’Pol was coming back to herself, but her eyes were flinching again, focusing on my chin, then somewhere on the wall behind my head, then back, as though she was afraid to really look at me. “Did I – injure you?” It was haardly even a whisper.

I grinned, hoping it would reassure her I was all right. “Well, you sure came on a little strong – but I’m pretty tough, and I like a challenge. Listen, T’Pol -” I tipped her chin so that her gaze almost met mine, and she swallowed back a sigh – “don’t you think we oughta talk about whatever the hell that was?”




What will T’Pol say? Will she try to pretend nothing happened? Does Trip get to taste his boot again? Find out what’s going on with the unexpected Vulcan in his life? Will T’Pol let him get up, or keep him on the floor a while?

You guessed it – you can watch the episode, or come back next week for another WIPpet snippet!

These posts are the seeds of a project I’ll be expanding in 2015, so your input is always valuable. No need to feel shy; I’m a friendly sort, and will keep my phase pistol on stun… for the most part. 😉


I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

21 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday: “Kroykah?”

  1. Hey – I got ripped off by not reading the hot sexxin’ that took place immediately preceding this! *weeps a little* What you’ve got here is amazing, though. I can really hear Trip’s voice and his reaction to T’Pol’s concern is so typically male – so typically Trip that I really think you’ve nailed it.

    I sympathize greatly with your loss of some writing. That’s like my worst nightmare, although it has happened before. I hit save 800 times an hour because of it. However I’m also not very organized and I tend to flit around on different projects so when I do return to them I’m sure I lose recent work because of that. I hope you’ll find it somehow!

    1. When I finally, eventually, someday, get to the end of the story, I plan on posting a recap with all the snippets, in order, and all pretty.

      Of course, that 2k story is now edging up on 8K, and the reconstruction-in-progress is better, but longer…

      Yeah, Trip’s a really good guy – but he’s still a guy. Not at all unlike the one I married, as a matter of fact, which might have a little something to do with being able to write him…

      I’m also a flitter- not counting IDIC and the Kifo Island project, I have 8 WIPs for the Trueborn duology drafted. After next month, it may be 10!

      My brain needs lots of different stuff to play with!

  2. Damn, woman! There is so much here that is all at once funny and hot and a bit sad and infuriating and frustrating and…yeah, like that. Way to scramble the emotions into a quivering ball.

    Only one nit, tripped over this, “the plasma-current of sharing cutting off almost painfully.” I read it a couple times and still couldn’t get it to flow smoothly. Then, of course, forgot all about it as I read on.

    1. Oh, goody! That was just the effect I was hoping for- the sense that this thing, whatever the hell it IS, is bigger than they are.

      And what’s a quivering ball of emotion to Trip is – well, an enormous tangle of impossibility to the long-betrothed T’Pol…reality is shifting, and she’s got nothing in the way of cultural reference to work with, here – except a lot of stuff that tells her that what she wants doesn’t matter…

      Except she can’t seem to get control of her responses to what she wants…

      And she’s not sure she wants to try…

      I knew that plasma-current bit didn’t work, but I couldn’t come up with something better.. still can’t.

      What I’m trying to convey is that Trip really, really digs whatever that thing is that happens when their fingers touch, and that he’s getting the idea that there’s another level to Vulcan sexuality, that they don’t use their hands exactly like humans do, and that the disconnection of that type of sharing is sudden and uncomfortable.

      Aha! I need to show it, I think, instead of talking about it! What it feels like, inside and out, when her fingers move away from his. What physical reaction they have…I’m not going to give it away, but I think I have an idea what that is…

      I’m so glad you didn’t TOTALLY forget that it bugged you, because the scene’s going to be even better when I rewrite it! =D

  3. Lovely Shan! I like the way that T’Pol is unsure, just as Trip is, although he seems more confident than she is at this point.

    I like the way Trip is feeling like he wants to get it right and not do something they’d both regret. 🙂

    1. I’ve got the feeling that reality as T’Pol knows it just suffered a serious blow, and may never recover, and that she’s just beginning to be able to understand that.

      Trip senses her bewilderment, and, just like with his sister, he wants to take care of her – he really IS a gentleman!

      Trip’s had over a year to fantasize about what it would be like to be with her, and I don’t think the floor of a cell where anyone might happen by anytime was ever the way he imagined this moment – of course, he probably also didn’t picture her being an expert at hand-to-hand combat, or shoving him into the wall, either.

      Somehow, though, I think those parts of her just make her more – uh – fascinating – to him!

      But the thought that she wouldn’t be fully able to enjoy the experience, and her inability to control herself –

      Being the chivalrous sort, he’s not gonna take that lying down – at least,not if he can help it….

      I think they’ve both got a great deal to learn!

  4. Ah, the way they’re both concerned for each other is just so marvelous. I’m imagining what she’s thinking though…she’s got to be conflicted. I’m wondering what she’s thinking about. She seems unsure about whether he wants her, and he seems to think she ought to be able to tell that he does. I wonder if that’s different for Vulcans, though. I mean, speaking only as a human female here, I like being able to make a man react that way. Does she? Or is it so different for them that it’s considered only a physical reaction and there’s something else (like the intensity between them) that is a better indication? I don’t know if that makes sense.

    1. I don’t think she’s as much confused about whether he wants her, as she is why he commanded her to stop. She’s going to be conflicted, soon – how could she not be, when she’s weeks away from getting married? – but right now, she’s mostly dazed, and, as she begins to come back to reality, she becomes very aware of how comparatively fragile humans are, and how out of control she was…that’s frightening to her, to think how easily she might have seriously hurt him without meaning to.

      Also, without giving anything away – she was intended to Awaken to Koss, remember, and not to this impetuous human. Vulcans reach full sexual maturity not at puberty but with the advent of their first pon farr – which brings the full capacity for telerotic connection, which (at least in my reality) is far more intense than physical contact).

      That sizzling sharing thing Trip felt when their fingers touched was the precursor to her full maturity, and that connection had a lot to do with how T’Pol responded, and it’s definitely what shakes her most – that she would feel this so powerfully from a human – a human who makes it clear that he felt it too, by talking about it.

      You made sense, and I hope I did, too. It took me a long time to begin to really understand the nature of Vulcan sexuality, but this series will delve that….

      I love making a man react that way, too – and I think, in time, T’Pol will, too. Right now, though, I think this is a brand-new world for her, and she’s more in shock at her own uncontrolled physical response, and the depth of the connection, than she is able to process Trip’s reaction, once she realizes what she’s done. From her perspective, she forced this encounter, and that’s not something she thought she was capable of….

      I’m thinking that I might want to extend this to a much longer story, and weave in T’Pol’s perspective – or, for now, it might be better to keep that hidden, and slowly reveal it in the subsequent story…

  5. A few years ago, I was still hanging on to writing my novels in actual notebooks with actual pens. I took great joy in selecting the perfect notebooks and the hunt for the perfect pen was a perpetual struggle, but one in which I took great satisfaction. Then…dun dun dun….my house burned down. I lost every book I had ever written. Including the only one I thought was worth being published. It took me between 2-3 years to re-write it because I was going completely from memory. However, the second draft is far and away better than the first one ever even dreamed of being. I changed the ending, added new characters, set it up so it could become a series….and it was just published yesterday with the second book in the series. In fact, you’ve been reading WIPpets from the 7th in the series. So I’m proof that disasters can turn into positive experiences. I also now back everything up to a cloud drive and religiously type every word. No more notebooks for this girl.

    As always, a great WIPpet. I can’t wait to see where it goes.

    1. Sirena, I so want to hug you! I have so many notebooks, and I choose them and my Bic Cristal gel pens very carefully! To have lost all of these, at once…!

      I’m thrilled that it worked out well for you. I’ve started saving things to the cloud, and that will be a big goal for me this winter – I like to organize things in the winter!

      These two really are tremendous fun to write, and I’m sure it’s going to grow and evolve even better, now that I’ll be reconstructing it. I’m past the shock and grief, and ready to create something even more wonderful!

    1. I’m not exactly sure T’Pol CAN talk, at the moment! Beyond repeating things and trying to figure out why Trip stopped her, and how she got into this position, I mean…

      But, if ALL the moments were heated, Trip would maybe be in agony, by now – and T’Pol….

      Well, somehow I get the feeling that once she really lets go, stopping isn’t going to happen right away. So maybe that cell is a risky place for this type of adventure…

  6. This scene was electrifying, even without any ‘action’. I love their reactions to the intense situation they’re in – these two continue to suck me right in to their little bubble. I’m on the edge of my seat to find out what happens next. I imagine poor Trip is feeling slightly uncomfortable – in more ways than one 😉

    1. I enjoyed this bit, too! I love T’Pol trying to comprehend Trip’s cease-fire command, and Trip thinking of his baby sister in a most seemingly inappropriate moment, and this being poised on the threshold they’ve both got going on.

      Yeah, Trip’s feeling uncomfortable, but in a good way. T’Pol, on the other hand – well, bewilderment and uncontainable passion aren’t exactly comfortable for Vulcans…

      Lots of confusion, and Trip might not be the only one experiencing physical discomfort, either..

      As for what’s next….

  7. Talking? Pffft. I want action! (And so do both of them I suspect).

    In my experience, disasters with loss of writing/edits usually turn out for the best. Doesn’t make them any less disastrous in the short term though!

    1. I think you’re right about them both…but we don’t always get what we want…and neither do they! 😉

      I’m guessing they won’t keep talking forever though, so…

      There was a moment of shock when I realized the story was gone. But I replaced the original whole, and WIPpeted snippets in Scrivener, and, in the process, read through the story both forward and backward, which I hadn’t done for a while. I’m giving it a couple of days, and then I’ll move on with the revision – and I suspect that you’re right, and it’ll be even better!

      May our disasters be both minor and fruitful! =D

    1. Trip kinda has a passion for old movies, and he especially loves the horror films. And Vulcan hearts are different…I totally think that’s how he would perceive hers – later on, we might just get to ask the lady what she thinks a human heartbeat feels like…

      As far as injuring him – well, a Vulcan male is about three times as strong as a human male. T’Pol’s clearly not male, but, with her high-level combat training and the state of arousal she’s in, I’m thinking causing him bodily harm would definitely be a concern.

      And, yeah, even from the start, even when they’re fighting it with all they’ve got, they DO seem to care for one another, and try to find common ground.

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