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WIPpet Wednesday: Closing the Gap

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It is hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys!

Here’s another snippet from The IDIC Romance, my Story A Day May Challenge project. This is a Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction, exploring the interspecies relationship of T’Pol and Trip.

For those keeping track:

This is the eleventh installment of Story #4, “Tigress T’Pol” . The prompt was to write a story of exactly 2000 words. An additional guest prompt from Heidi Durrow invited us to explore passion in this story.

Disclaimer: T’Pol, Trip, and all the rest of Star Trek are property of CBS/Paramount; no copyright infringement intended. I just want to play with them, and I’m careful!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is September 10, 2014.
  • 24 sentences (10+14, for the day and the last two digits of the year). I’m adding the last two from last week’s snippet, for continuity.

This snippet follows immediately after last week’s WIPpet, Small Steps. Trip and T’Pol, imprisoned together, are closing the distance between them…

This is an add-on scene for the pilot episode: “Broken Bow Part 1”. Ive done my best to extrapolate without violating series canon.

From last week:

Now T’Pol took a step closer – a small step, true, and she looked like she could bolt back to the corner any second, but a step. “ Your behavior has been – honest.”

And now this week’s snippet:

Honest?” I took another step, as she raised her eyes to look directly into mine. I thought about how I’d treated her, yelled at her, acted like a spoiled brat who didn’t want to listen to reason. “I really have been a jackass. I’m sorry; you deserve better -”

Please don’t change, Trip.” Her eyes were wide, almost glowing, and this time she came two steps nearer, so that now we were standing, just beyond arm’s reach from one another, in the middle of the cell. “I have -difficulty – interpreting the emotional responses of most of the crew -and I’ve learned emotions are integral to human motivation. Yours are – abundantly clear.” Her scent wafted over me like a caress, even though her hands were clasped behind her the way they’d been when she turned her back on me in the Captain’s ready room.

Maybe I was putting my foot in it again, but there was something in the way she looked at me that said there was more going on here. I edged a bit closer; not exactly a step. “And what about your feelings, T’Pol?” Maybe she’d shut down, tell me she didn’t have any feelings. But after that kiss, there was no way I was gonna believe her.

I feel that I have greatly underestimated you, Trip, and that I have harbored a great many misconceptions about your people.” She paused, looked away, swallowed, and then her gaze caught at mine, pulling me in, and she took a large step, so that her body was almost touching mine. Damn. “As for our first – interaction – it is a memory I have treasured, since, and I will continue to do so.”

My cheeks ached from grinning at her, and I shuffled my feet closer, leaving the tiniest bit of space between us. I’d initiated the kiss; something told me I couldn’t press her too far now. “I’m happy to hear that. Real happy, as a matter of fact. Delirious, almost.”

 

What will T’Pol do next? Did Trip push things too far? Did everyone else just forget that these two exist? Will they spend the whole series in this cell?

You guessed it – you can watch the episode, or come back next week for another WIPpet snippet!

These posts are the seeds of a project I’ll be expanding in 2015, so your input is always valuable. No need to feel shy; I’m a friendly sort, and will keep my phase pistol on stun… for the most part. 😉

 

 

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

16 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday: Closing the Gap

  1. *happy sigh* That was completely lovely. I like that T’Pol is opening up a bit and I love that she admitted that she treasured their first interaction. Favorite line: “My cheeks ached from grinning at her, and I shuffled my feet closer, leaving the tiniest bit of space between us.” Great job! That’s the epitome of “show, don’t tell.”

    1. It was so much fun to get them to this point. I can’t blame Trip for grinning, when the pretty little Vulcan lady makes a confession like that. And the sidling a little closer…I don’t think the poor man could help himself.

      Of course, we can’t have things getting TOO comfortable for these two… 😉

    1. I can hear him saying it, and seeing that patented Trip grin! Oh, yeah, he thinks he’s got it all together – for now…but do we think it’s gonna STAY that easy?!

      These two are awesome together, in no small part because it’s not easy…

      Thank you for the compliment. I really enjoy writing these two! =D

  2. I like that shuffle-shuffle they’re doing. More than that, though, I like T’Pol’s moment of understanding. She seems to have cut through years of racism and (unintentional) bigotry in one smooth slice. I realize it wasn’t really a smooth process, but for her it seems like this is the moment it becomes clear in her mind.

    1. The ‘shuffle-shuffle’ is a good description of the dance they do. Moving closer, stumbling, jumping back…

      And this is a critical moment for T’Pol. She’d always been interested in humans, even as a child, and she’s made a point of studying their cultures, but she carried a lot of Vulcan ideas she didn’t know she’d absorbed.

      For her, this is where she starts to understand all the things she doesn’t know, all the tings she’s assumed – both about Trip, and the rest of his people. From this point on, she stops seeing humanity as only an immature and illogical species, and instead REALLY trying to understand him, and them, as individuals (not something that Vulcans are prone to doing).

      You’re right. This slice of insight is pretty smooth, but it’s hardly the end of her journey to understanding…

      Of course, she’s a ways ahead of her human shipmates, including Trip, although he IS trying. They’ve only got one Vulcan to convince them, and they tend to see her ONLY as Vulcan, for quite some time to come…

  3. As much as you like SF, I really think you should try your hand at romance one of these days, Shan! I hear there can be lots of money in it. 🙂 Great sexual tension here, not an easy thing to do.

    1. Wanna know a secret? I’m not a huge SF fan. I love Star trek, and several of Heinlein’s books, and scattered others – but, as a genre, I don’t either read or watch a great deal of sci-fi.

      I love good stories with complex characters, which may be why I love Spock and T’Pol so much. They’re both very complex characters. And, as for sexual tension, the writers and actors in the series did a (pardon the pun) consummate job drawing it out while still keeping it as a subtextual thread throughout the series. If they hadn’t, this would be a lot harder to manage… but these two are delicious together.

      As for romance – for a long time, I thought the only romances were formula ones, and I didn’t want to write those. But a few of my Kifo island stories are romances (these were my A-Z Challenge stories this year).

      I’ll be developing them into a series of novellas, beginning in 2015. I’m excited to see how they evolve, and you may have given me a new angle I hadn’t considered as thoroughly as I could…

      Thanks for the input, and the inspiration!

      1. Heh, so only Star Trek, hey? I think I should send you copies of Looking Through Lace and Beyond the Waters of World, with their romance sub-plots. 🙂

        And if you want to check out romance novels that aren’t as formulaic, I would suggest checking out Laura Kinsale’s Flowers in the Storm and For my Lady’s Heart. I know there are a couple of other outliers I’ve particularly enjoyed, but the names aren’t coming to me right now.

        1. Wellllll….not ONLY Star Trek, but definitely MOSTLY. Looking Through Lace has caught my eye more than once; I love the cover! Thing is, there’s already a “stack” of novels waiting on my Kindle…and my own characters don’t seem to want to let me go (especially Trip and T’Pol – those to are rather relentless!)!

          I’ll save these suggestions, though, because I will eventually need to come up for air, and I do tend to read a lot more in the late fall and through the winter…

          You’ve definitely opened my eyes to a world of new possibilities, already…because I needed MORE ideas for things to write about! ;D

  4. “Delirious almost.” For some reason that made me laugh. Oh, Trip! And oh, Shan! You do know how to build the sexual tension, don’t you. I doff my hat and tip my quill.

    1. He made me chuckle when he said that, too! I’m guessing he really didn’t know how she felt about that night until then – and he’s been having fantasies about it for a year!

      These two have a loooong slow burn. And so much of it is in little gestures and exchanges. It’s a dance, with lots of backing up and missteps.

      My biggest challenge is in finding these little story gaps and taking advantage without outstripping the canon of the series…for instance, in Broken Bow, we see a Suliban taking note of TnT as they go by, and then the Captain tries to raise T’Pol via communicator, and gets static, and then we see them in the cell.

      I had to wait quite a while before these two told me what they were up to in there!

      But I will accept all doffed headgear, and quills are very, very cool! =D

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