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WIPpet Wednesday: Small Steps

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It is hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys!

I am now the mother of an adolescent! It seems like just yesterday I was staring at a giant baby boy who could hold up his head, and now, he’s just an inch or two shorter than me, and seeming, at once, very grown and still quite young. He amazes me.

And he’ll still hug me – even in public. ❤

And he’s thirteen!

Enough of the sappy. On to the happy!

Today’s snippet comes from The IDIC Romance, my Story A Day May Challenge: Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction, an exploration of the interspecies relationship of T’Pol and Trip. I’ll be sharing the remainder of this story, and a Twitter fiction, before we give Trip and T’Pol some much-needed privacy.

Update: When I went back to edit this section of the story, something interesting happened. I didn’t like the original ending, which was abrupt, because of the length prompt. Well, it’s much better now – and the story is about 1,500 words longer than it was, too!

Since these two are getting a LOT of positive feedback from folks who enjoy them (almost) as much as I do, I’m guessing there won’t be too many complaints about that! =D

Disclaimer: T’Pol, Trip, and all the rest of Star Trek are property of CBS/Paramount; no copyright infringement intended. I just want to play with them, and I’m careful!

Story a Day is just that- a story every day in May. To make the challenge more interesting, I used all of the prompts. The stories are sequential, with various tones, POVs, and voices.

For those keeping track:

This is installment 9 of Story #4, “Tigress T’Pol” . The prompt was to write a story of exactly 2000 words. An additional guest prompt from Heidi Durrow invited us to explore passion in this story.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is September 3, 2014.
  • Yesterday, my son turned 13 – a milestone age! =D
  • Therefore 25 sentences, today, because 13+9+3=25.

This snippet follows immediately after last week’s WIPpet, Intimate Contact. Trip and T’Pol make tentative advances…

This is an add-on scene for the pilot episode: “Broken Bow Part 1”. Ive done my best to extrapolate without violating series canon.

 

“And the Cap’n told me I was supposed to ‘extend you every courtesy’ -” I shrugged and gave her a little smile, hoping it would relax her; I could see her tension in the lines of her body. I hadn’t really thought about it – but I was an alien, to her. “Maybe we’ve both messed things up. But, since we’re the only ones who know about it, maybe we can just agree to forget about it.”

T’Pol’s brow creased, and she went very still again. Her eyes were intent on my face. “You wish us to forget both our first meeting, and your emotional response to my presence aboard Enterprise?”, she asked, in a voice so absolutely flat, I knew right away that my answer was going to affect whatever happened between us. I stuck my tongue in my cheek to keep myself from blurting out the first answer that came to me – assuming one even did. Think, man – she’s after something, here. What is it?

But how the hell was I supposed to guess? She was a Vulcan, after all – and it had only taken a few minutes of working with her to see that her brain used a very different operating system than mine –

Then again, she was a woman. She’d proven that, in the club, and in my arms. And maybe, beneath all the Vulcanness, that’s the part that waited to hear what I would say; needed to hear something she could hold onto. I didn’t have a lot of experience with girlfriends, but I’d had a sister most of my life. I thought of Lizzie, and what I’d want a guy to say to her, in this situation.

I took a step closer; she didn’ retreat, but I could almost feel her quivering again, and she was back to not-quite-meeting my eyes. “T’Pol – I could never forget meeting you, and, even if I could, I wouldn’t want to. That was maybe the best twelve minutes and sixteen seconds of my life, and, well, I’m a little embarrassed to tell you how many times I’ve stayed up too late thinking about -well, how it might have turned out. And, as for the way I’ve treated you -”

Now T’Pol took a step closer – a small step, true, and she looked like she could bolt back to the corner any second, but a step. “ Your behavior has been – honest.”

 

Just what does T’Pol mean by that? Will Trip get this right, or blow it? Will these two find a way to deal with the feelings between them? Will we ever learn why they were put in that cell?

You guessed it – you can watch the episode, click the links below, or come back next week for the conclusion of this story!

Story A Day excerpt and commentary…

Full original version of the story…

These posts are the seeds of a project I’m expanding in 2015. Your input is valuable. No need to feel shy; I’m a friendly sort, and will keep my phase pistol on stun… for the most part. 😉

 

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

12 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday: Small Steps

  1. Congratulations to your boy!

    Good answer, Trip! It looked sketchy there, for a minute. Hooray for having a sister! T’Pol is so funny to me. That whole, “Yes. but no. but yes, but… Logic! I need LOGIC!” thing she has going is so much fun to watch.

    1. Thank you! So far, it’s a good if a bit tempestuous beginning – growth spurt on the horizon!

      And Trip pulled that miracle out of his ole’ engineering toolkit. Great to have a sister, and that he was close enough to her to think about what might ease her mind…

      And poor, flummoxed T’Pol. If only Trip had the faintest clue about the cataclysms going on inside of her…

      **Yes. but no. but yes, but… Logic! I need LOGIC!”** sums it up. All her life, she’s been told to put the needs of the many above her own desires – and here’s this impulsive, irrational, impudent human who twists all that up on its pointy ear…

      And of course, there’s still that inconvenient Koss guy to consider…the guy Trip knows nothing about…

      No, nothing rocky to confuse either of them…! 😉

    1. Trip is certainly a charmer….but I think he’s got his work cut out for him in T’Pol. It’s pretty much a given that not all of the tried and true will work on her –

      Which may, now that I think of it, be a big part of his early attraction to her…he does seem to be the type of guy who loves a challenge! =D

      We’re enjoying getting used to this having/being a teenager thing! =D

  2. Yes, these two are scrumptious. But oh, I was waiting for Trip to put his foot in it again! Nice save, buddy. Nice save. 😉

    1. Don’t worry – I think he’s going to get many more chances to stick his foot in his mouth….and he’s too much Trip to miss all of them! =D

      And, oh yes! Scrumtious they are, indeed! =D

    1. Thanks, Ruth! It really is fun to wind them up and watch them go at it…

      We are a strong-willed family, so there is sometimes attitude from all of us. On the whole, though, Jeremiah is a pretty laid-back type, and always has been. The fireworks are far more likely to come from our ten-year-old daughter. She’s a Force of Nature to be reckoned with!

  3. Oh, boy. He’d better watch his next move! At least he’s trying, right?

    Kids do grow up so fast. I sent my older one to middle school today, and I’m sure I’m much more nervous than he is. He was so excited he left early for his bus. Happy birthday to your newly-minted teenager. He sounds like a loving, affectionate kid. Hopefully that will carry him through the rough patches of adolescence.

    1. He’s definitely trying…trouble is, T’Pol is a rather trying woman to get the hang of…

      Thank you for the well wishes. It does seem like these 13 years have sped right by! And yes, he is very loving and affectionate. I think he’s going to do fine -and he’s got backup!

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