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WIPpet Wednesday: When the Limb Breaks…

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It is hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys!

It’s been an odd week for me, so far. Things got thrown a bit out of kilter during my time-traveling, and haven’t quite settled, yet. So I’m still more or less winging it, trying to deal with things and regain my equilibrium.

Kinda like today’s WIPpet. Equilibrium seems to be in short supply for our two canoodling characters, who we left in a rather intense lip-lock…

How about you? Are you feeling balanced, or a little swept away by life or romance or even chaos?

Today’s snippet comes from The IDIC Romance, my Story A Day May Challenge: Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction, exploration of the interspecies relationship of T’Pol and Trip. I’ll be sharing the remainder of this story, and a Twitter fiction, before we give Trip and T’Pol some much-needed privacy.

Disclaimer: T’Pol, Trip, and all the rest of Star Trek are property of CBS/Paramount; no copyright infringement intended. I just want to play with them, and I’m careful!

Story a Day is just that- a story every day in May. To make the challenge more interesting for myself, I used all of the prompts offered throughout the month. The stories are sequential, with various tones, POVs, and voices.

For those keeping track:

This is the seventh installment of Story #4, “Tigress T’Pol” . The prompt was to write a story of exactly 2000 words. An additional guest prompt from Heidi Durrow invited us to explore passion in this story.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is August 20, 2014.
  • 20 sentences, nice and simple.

This snippet follows immediately after last week’s WIPpet, The Happiest Human on Rigel 10. Trip and T’Pol, together in a cell, have succumbed to the temptation to explore their mutual attraction…but just how far will this go?

This is an add-on scene for the pilot episode: “Broken Bow Part 1”. Ive done my best to extrapolate without violating series canon.

T’Pol let go of my uniform, wriggled her hand free; her trembling index and middle fingers uncurling and drifting in the air just above my shoulder, then tracing the path down my arm to my hand. Her pupils were so dilated, her eyes seemed almost black, pulling me in, begging me wordlessly to touch my fingertips to hers. I fumbled my fingers into a matching position, and hers found them with the force of a diamagnetic pull ,sizzling from our joined fingertips, into my arm, through my whole body, like a tiny line of plasma fire. T’Pol shuddered, moaning her urgent breath into my mouth, and I could feel her; feel the same fire moving through her, through us both, together, pulling us closer, somehow, than our bodies could get –

Desire swallowed us whole, and we were sliding down the wall, bodies straining and frantic, when T’Pol pulled her mouth a little away, and whispered something in Vulcan.


Kroykah,” she panted, and her eyes were wild with something I didn’t understand any more than the Vulcan word. T’Pol swallowed, hard, and stared at me, as though she had to remember how to say it in English. “S-Stop,” she stuttered, even though her body was still getting all tangled up in mine.

Aww, hell…” I gritted my teeth and wished for a second that I wasn’t a gentleman as I let go of her, trying valiantly to convince my bloodflow to shift so I could actually think. T’Pol stiffened and took a half step backwards, watching me with impossibly wide, glittering eyes. “I’m sorry, Subcommander. I was way out of line. It won’t happen again.” What the hell had I been thinking, anyway, kissing T’Pol -our damned Vulcan “chaperone”? Usually, my problem with women was that I was too shy; with T’Pol, I didn’t seem to know when to stop.

“You’ve done nothing wrong.” Her voice was soft and hesitant; her gaze darted up almost to my eyes, then jerked away, like she maybe was afraid to look at me, now. “It’s I who should apologize for my – atypical – lapse of control.”

What happened to break that limb trip was out on, and spook T’Pol? Will Trip be able to recover? Will she? And how long are they going to be locked in this cell, and do they really even care, anymore?

You guessed it – you can watch the episode, or come back next week for another WIPpet snippet!

Story A Day excerpt and commentary…

Full original version of the story…

These posts are the seeds of a project I’ll be expanding in 2015, so your input is always valuable. No need to feel shy; I’m a friendly sort, and will keep my phase pistol on stun… for the most part. 😉


I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

22 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday: When the Limb Breaks…

    1. Trip Tucker is a gentleman among men. Not always easy, especially where T’Pol is concerned, but he’s got a moral standard and he abides by it.

      He really is a great guy, right from the start. I’m loving getting to know him even better.

      Oh, and, even though you haven’t gotten to see him much in that light, he’s a pretty damned awesome self-taught engineer, too! =D

  1. Oh…ah…yeah…you need to stop steaming it up in here. 😉 This line, “trying valiantly to convince my bloodflow to shift so I could actually think.” Oh, that is a priceless gem right there! (Makes me think of another character, actually.) Well done.

  2. I loved this electric steamy scene 🙂 I haven’t had the pleasure of previous instalments, but I’ll be looking out for more. I could practically see the steam coming off those two!

    1. Thank you! The steam and chemistry between these two was evident right from the pilot episode. I have a near life-long love of Vulcans, and T’Pol is – well, she’s AWESOME! She’s definitely not a pedestal Vulcan; she’s delightfully real, with flaws and wit and a temper Trip triggers more often than anyone else.

      And they are both extremely blunt, and stubborn. Makes for lots of fireworks!)

      If you want to read back to the beginning of this story series with this post:

      You could use the calendar from there, to find the subsequent posts.

      Or you can just pick up from here. I’m glad you enjoyed it! =)

        1. I think I’m in love with them both – and how they are together… when they get it right, AND when they don’t.

          Our late dog did not like fireworks one bit. He wasn’t too crazy about thunderstorms, either….

          But Trip and T’Pol fireworks… those are the good kind! =D

  3. Great excerpt Shan. I like the way you get inside your characters’ minds so well. But I think I read it wrong to begin with – I thought they were doing more than just kissing lol! 🙂

    1. Well, from a human standpoint, they were kissing and getting tangled up and pressed together. But from a Vulcan standpoint….

      Well, Vulcans are telepathic, and that’s a fundamental part of their sexuality, so, from T’Pol’s standpoint, that shiver of fire between them was far more intimate than the kissing (not something Vulcans do in the same way…).

      There is a definite reason why she backs off so suddenly. I don’t think she meant for it to happen, nor did she expect it to be anywhere near that intense. This is all a lot newer to her, since she’s only recently Awakened, and human foreplay is, of course, alien to her until this moment.

      So, as to more than kissing going on here – yes, and no, depending on whom you ask!

      Glad you liked it. I’ve been having almost as much fun as these two! =D

  4. Interesting how deeply Trip feels the connection through his fingertips then throughout his body…. Just one more hint that, maybe this pairing is the more suited one for T’Pol than the one she was promised to?

    1. What he feels is very similar to what T’Pol felt in the club, when she first Awakened to him. Although neither of them fully grasp it, it’s a telerotic connection.

      I think it bodes very well for our sparring sweethearts, and very badly for a guy named Koss, who maybe never really stood a chance, at least not after T’Pol met Trip.

      I’m not sure Trip’s gonna get a chance to really think about that moment for a while – but it’s a pretty safe bet that T’Pol has just touched him in a way no one else ever has, and that he’s not just going to forget about it…

      Of course, logically, these two are completely wrong for one another!

        1. What it is is not very useful, in this situation… at least, not until T’Pol realizes that there’s a logic to emotion, too…but that’s gonna be a while….

  5. I look forward to reading your WIPpet each week. It’s made me want to go re-watch Enterprise. I never finished the series and now I really want to, just to see how all the characters ended up. I was always more a fan of Voyager, but this makes me think I was really missing something with what I watched of Enterprise.

    1. The last episode could, IMO, be skipped. It’s – not good. Nope. Doesn’t fit. I stop short of calling it an abomination, but some folks do go there…

      The two episodes before the end, “Demons” and “Terra Prime” – now they would have made a perfect ending. In every way, with enough questions left over to pick up where they left off.

      I tend to see very subtle things on screen that swell into new life in my head…but since they began in an episode, I tend to fill in the blanks, and I won’t violate canon intentionally (except possibly that last episode….).

      You’ve piqued my curiosity about Voyager, too. Maybe I was too judgmental. I’ll be doing the ST Chronology Challenge in 2015….and I get to start with Enterprise (I say as though I ever FINISH with Enterprise – BWAHAHA!). I’ll be doing Voyager just before the reboot, so I’ll let you know what I think as I move through it.

  6. how long are they going to be locked in this cell, and do they really even care, anymore?

    Haha, this made me laugh. Very intense, well-written scene. Your writing just seems to be very natural, it flows well 🙂

    1. Honestly, I’m not even sure either of them REMEMBER they’re locked in a cell, anymore!

      First deep space mission? Suliban? Kidnapped wounded Klingon? Not even on their long-range sensors…

      I love that the writing seems natural – if you follow the link to the original version, you’ll see that there’s been a LOT of revision.

      But Trip and T’Pol are always whispering in my head, and telling me their business (which seems to be decidedly on the intense side, overall), so writing them does feel pretty natural.

      Not to mention frustratingly fun.

  7. Oh, my! That was quite incendiary! Love how Trip is a good guy even though he really really doesn’t want to be one! And T’Pol …. even a Vulcan girl’s gotta give in to those secret desires sometimes, it seems!

    1. Trip can’t help himself – he’s a gentleman by nature and nurture. He might hate it, but stop means stop, in any language.

      And T’Pol – I think you might have missed the previous stories I’ve WIPpeted from this series, but T’Pol has particular reasons for the lapse of control. She’s Awakened to Trip, as a result of a chance encounter about 14 months before they meet on Enterprise. She’s been struggling with a telerotic connection to him, and she just faced off against 5 Suliban, and got rid of three before suffering a blow to the head…

      And these humans keep changing the mission, and doing things for reasons she can’t begin to understand, but knows are not based on logic…and the ship has a different vibration, and, between that and Trip, she can’t meditate, so she’s off-balance….

      And more. She’s expected to go home soon, to formalize her marriage, arranged by her and her Intended’s parents when they were children. She’s met Koss only four times in her life…

      With all that going on, even a Vulcan woman might just give in to the temptation that is Trip Tucker with his arms around her. =)

  8. So steamy! My favorite line: “trying valiantly to convince my bloodflow to shift so I could actually think.” Oh, my goodness. That made me giggle. Sometimes UST is better than its counterpart!

    1. Poor Trip. Poor T’Pol. I giggled too, but it’s maybe not so nice to do so when he’s trying so hard to be a gentleman under such – umm – trying – circumstances…

      Thy are very very good together, but I’m not sure Trip would agree with you on the UST, at the moment. The lady has had quite the effect on him….and I have a feeling it’s going to be a part of their interactions for a while…

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