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WIPpet Wednesday: Bigger Problems

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move their WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date. It is hosted by the lovely K.L. Schwengel, maven of bad boys, stock dogs, and flying monkeys!

I was camping with my kids last weekend, and didn’t get around to visit everyone. I hope to make up for that this week!

I’m continuing with snippets from my Story A Day May Challenge: Star Trek: Enterprise fan fiction exploring the interspecies relationship of T’Pol and Trip, in a project titled (at least for now) The IDIC Romance.

Disclaimer: T’Pol, Trip, and all the rest of Star Trek are property of CBS/Paramount; no copyright infringement intended. I just want to play with them, and I’m careful!

Story a Day is just that- a story every day in May. To make the challenge more interesting for myself, I used all of the prompts offered throughout the month. The stories are sequential, with various tones, POVs, and voices.

For those keeping track:

This is the third installment of Story #4, “Tigress T’Pol” . The prompt was to write a story of exactly 2000 words. An additional guest prompt from Heidi Durrow invited us to explore passion in this story. Hopefully, you’ll see the passion as we go along!

How about a different view of Jolene Blalock -and a hint as to why poor Trip is so addled?

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is July 23, 2014.
  • 23 sentences, for the day.

This snippet is told from Trip’s point of view and follows immediately after last week’s WIPpet, Little Miss Logical. Trip and T’Pol are on Rigel 10, searching for the wounded Klingon who was abducted from Enterprise. T’Pol seems to think she’s in charge, and Trip is growing resentful, which doesn’t do anything to defuse his growing desire for his Vulcan companion, who seems utterly oblivious to his emotional turmoil…and then things start to get interesting.

This is an add-on scene for the pilot episode: “Broken Bow Part 1”. Ive done my best to extrapolate without violating series canon.

Come on, Trip, get a grip – you’ve gotta stop staring at her and wondering about her mating protocols, as if she’s ever gonna share them with the likes of you.” It made me mad to think that just being human was enough, apparently, to eliminate me from her precious gene pool – nope, she obviously had no use for half-human, inferior offspring whose feeble minds weren’t up to playing with toys ‘more sophisticated than Enterprise’s sensors’.

Being mad at her was safer than wanting her. I didn’t need her bossing me around; I’d done pretty well for myself, and I’d never needed a Vulcan nursemaid, before now. I half-ran to catch up, dodging aliens of all shapes and size, and grabbed her shoulder, the way she had mine, trying to spin her around to face me. “Who the hell said you were in charge here?”

T’Pol slipped out from under my hand as though it was just so much more air, and kept walking without even bothering to look at me.

I’ve had more than enough of your damned Vulcan superiority,” I snarled, and stomped off in the opposite direction, as if I had some idea where the hell I was going or what I was going to do to find a wounded Klingon.

“Commander.” Her voice was sharp as a gator’s teeth, snapping at my conscience. I kept on going – I’d be damned if I was going to let her know that she was getting to me. “Commander Tucker -“

“Shut up!” Yeah, real adult, Trip. Maybe she had a point with that ‘impulsive carnivores’ line of hers – I sure as hell wasn’t doing anything to prove her wrong.

“Trip!”

It was closer to a yell than I’d ever heard from a Vulcan – and now it was Trip, not Commander Tucker.

I turned back to tell her not to bother calling me by my nickname, but T’Pol was facing off against three circling Suliban. Something slammed hard into my back, and I ducked and rolled instinctively, my weapon sailing away into the shadows as another Suliban jumped me.

I got in a couple of solid licks, but my fists bounced off him, like he was made of rubber instead of flesh. Before I could come up with a better plan, he leapt over my head and yanked my arms painfully behind me.

My captor wrenched me around to where more Suliban milled around a pivoting figure – T’Pol was tiny in the midst of them. I noticed that none of them seemed eager to get too close to her, though, and there were two more down on the ground, not moving. “Watch, puny Hu-man,” he hissed into my ear. “This Vulcan woman fights better than you!”

And let’s even things out with a Connor Trinneer interview…just in case you need to hear Trip’s voice in your head. Look for the on-set interview on the playlist.

Can T’Pol escape the Suliban? Will she try to rescue Trip? Why are the Suliban attacking them in the first place? How will this affect their mission? And will Trip ever get the chance to satisfy his curiosity about Vulcan mating protocols?

You guessed it – you can watch the episode, or come back next week for another WIPpet snippet!

Story A Day excerpt and commentary…

Full original version of the story…

These posts are the seeds of a project that will germinate over the next months, so input is especially valuable. Already, new stories are weaving themselves into the fabric. No need to feel shy; I’m a friendly sort, and will keep my phase pistol on stun ..for the most part.

And, because I love it, and because it’s got bits of Rigel 10 in the beginning, and hints of things yet to come…

Author:

I am myself. I own my life, and live with three other people who own theirs. My intention is to do only those things that bring me joy, and to give myself wholly to those things I do. Writing has been my passion throughout my life, and this will become the home for my writing life...because it brings me great joy!

13 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday: Bigger Problems

  1. Interesting interview video… In that Jolene reminds me very much of an interview I saw of Shannen Doherty once. Also interesting that these two very giggly, generally happy women both went to play intensely serious characters in their careers….

    Having read the piece you posted for Story A Day, this isn’t “new” reading…. I still love it. It has my favorite lines. And I can so relate (actually to both of them, since a lot of T’Pol’s reactions are very “normal” to someone who’s been raised in a society where the group as a whole is versus the individual). Nicely played. 😉

    1. I love the way she’s sensual and playful and giggly. I love it even more when she does that while filming…the bits where T’Pol cracks and Jolene is laughing herself silly are about priceless.

      I’m wondering if she could have played T’Pol as well if she hadn’t had her own fascination with Vulcans, and a desire to play Spock’s daughter.

      I do love the subtle way she infuses T’Pol with sensuality, which lays the groundwork early for things still a ways off…

      It is and isn’t new reading, since the Story-a-Day version underwent a pretty intensive rewrite for WIPpet purposes.

      Yes, that’s it. T’Pol doesn’t naturally consider feelings as relevant – not her own, nor anyone else’s. She’s struggling with her own emotions in private – but they aren’t a factor when she’s on duty. And she really doesn’t understand yet just how deeply humans feel, and how much emotions affect everything….

      Failure to translate, on both sides. T’Pol doesn’t even do a decent job of playing a damsel in distress – cause you know Trip would just love to sweep in and rescue her!

  2. *sigh* Shan, I may have to stop reading your WIPpets. You’re sucking me into a universe I don’t have time for! It’s going to get to a point where I’m either checking out all the Enterprise DVD’s at the library and desperately trying to find excuses to watch TV for hours on end or bugging you on FB/Twitter for updates. :-/

    1. I think maybe I ought to be a little sorry for doing this to you ReGi – but I’m not, not really. Writers can be cruel!

      If you have either Netflix of Amazon Prime, you can watch Enterprise there. There’s only four seasons; I took my time the first go-through, because I wanted to keep the new as long as I could.

      Ah, Twitter and Facebook….ummm…I’ve been so busy writing and living, I’ve barely been in either place for maybe a week! Thanks for reminding me.

      If it helps, I may go back to Henry and Tisira in Sepetember, depending upon how the revision is going, and what the prevailing WIPpeteer opinion is…

      1. I like Henry and Tisira. 🙂

        Nope. No Netfliix, Prime, cable, or other such thing. We’re content with free channels, the library (also free), and the occasional $1.50 rental. 🙂

        1. I like Henry and Tisira, too. I’m getting to the point where I’m missing them.

          I believe you can watch Enterprise free on CBS.com. See, there I go, giving you more options on how to spend all that time you don’t have.

  3. Ha! This one has a couple of good lines. The one about how he “tries” to turn her by the shoulder, the carnivore one…oh and puny human. And I like the way it goes from him stewing over his feelings and trying to bury them, to the enemy trying to bury him. Nicely done.

    1. Yup – Trip’s not going to turn T’Pol around if she isn’t willing to be turned around. At this point, she isn’t (she heard him muttering about ‘mating protocols’ plain as day, and she’s got her own struggle for control in that area….).

      The ‘impulsive carnivores’ came from the episode. At the first dinner in the Captan’s Mess with Captain Archer and Trip, T’Pol eyes Trip’s big ole steak dinner, and comments, “You humans claim to be enlightened, yet you still consume the flesh of animals. You remain impulsive carnivores.”

      Needless to say, that was NOT the way to make nice with the humans…

      Poor puny Trip. He’s certainly not feeling very virile or necessary right now. It can be hard to be the new human on the block, I guess.

      It’s funny how someone ambushing him and threatening that woman who’s got him all riled up can shift his perspective, isn’t it? 😉

    1. Why, thank you. My parents were anti-Trek, but I got hooked, anyway. I think Enterprise may just be my favorite series, for many reasons. Like T’Pol. And Trip. =)

      If you enter the category tag ‘The IDIC Romance’, you can find all the WIPpets I’ve done so far. I’ll be with this story at least through August.

      I ended up with over 60,000 words for this series of stories, and I’ll be polishing them up and offering them at a fan fiction site somewhere in 2015. I’ll be sure to announce the details here.

      While I love getting new people interested in Trek, there is also something special about praise from someone who will know if I write a dud. So happy you stopped by!

  4. Well, that’s quite a cliff-hanger! I’m eager to see what happens next. Funny how I can relate so much more to him in some ways than to her. That thing about it being easier to be mad than to want her? Yeah. I remember feeling that way a time or two.

    1. The way the episode aired, we see trip rather begrudgingly following T’Pol offscreen – and their next scene makes it clear that SOMETHING happened.

      It’s a WIPpet type cliffhanger, because this takes place about midstory. But, you know, if I can draw out the suspense and torment my readers… =)

      It doesn’t seem so funny to me that you’re identifying more with Trip than with T’Pol at this point. T’Pol may be female, but she’s a Vulcan female…and that’s a very different type of thing…

      Trip, on the other hand, is utterly, completely human. I think a lot of us have experienced being mad at someone to avoid feeling what we really feel for them…and T’Pol definitely seems to bring out this side of him…

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